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Panic
Sounds:
pounding,
panic,
screams,
chaos.
Just feelings -
overwhelming anyway.
Inside
wondering if the slightest change of sensation
could be the click
the indication of spontaneous self destruct.
Any moment
Paranoia
Don't let it set in.
Fight it how you can-
peace,
mantras,
chanting,
praying.
Hope that you're deceiving yourself.
It's surely
guilt
from selfish indulgence.
All in your head.
Just breathe.
pounding,
panic,
screams,
chaos.
Just feelings -
overwhelming anyway.
Inside
wondering if the slightest change of sensation
could be the click
the indication of spontaneous self destruct.
Any moment
Paranoia
Don't let it set in.
Fight it how you can-
peace,
mantras,
chanting,
praying.
Hope that you're deceiving yourself.
It's surely
guilt
from selfish indulgence.
All in your head.
Just breathe.
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Anonymous
22nd Aug 2010 9:43am
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dag
23rd Sep 2010 7:38pm
i like it... wish i had something more constructive to say, but.. i like it.
i think this could probably be broken into a few pieces, but just as good all the same.
i think this could probably be broken into a few pieces, but just as good all the same.
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re: dag
27th Sep 2010 9:53am
oo, interesting. i never would have thought of breaking it up because it seemed to all run into itself for me in the emotes department...but thank you so much for the feedback, i value any input i can get. [:
Oooo
27th Sep 2010 5:59pm
Guilt is almost as tasty as the thing for which to feel the guilt. There is that panic that arises from fear of the consequences but after that subsides you realize that no matter the results you have something. Devil's advocate? maybe. But it feels nice, the act AND the panic.
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re: Oooo
28th Sep 2010 2:41pm
i know what you mean, it's the experience that you're left with and you have it ever afterwards regardless of the fading now. devil's advocate indeed! these thrill junkies, i tell ya. [:
Waitaminnit...
28th Sep 2010 4:40pm
re: Waitaminnit...
30th Sep 2010 9:35am
ha! well i prefer the accusation route... so that's what i'll roll with. how about that? ;]
re: re: Waitaminnit...
8th Oct 2010 4:50pm
Guilty as charged. Hmmmm.... I think you've inspired me, accusations and all. Let's see where this rabbit hole goes...
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re: re: re: Waitaminnit...
8th Oct 2010 5:26pm
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Anonymous
- Edited 30th Nov 2010 9:46pm
30th Nov 2010 9:45pm
You describe panic so beautifully here. As someone who suffers from an anxiety disorder, I could really relate, and your choice of words has real resonance. But even without that identification, I enjoyed this because it's just so well put together. The lines are placed in such a way that it's clear you've considered the structure of this piece, and given it at least one thorough proof read. There are no spelling or grammar mistakes, either. I like it when writers are modest enough to put some thought into the presentation of their work, as opposed to just shitting on the page and expecting applause.
My one suggestion would be that you change the first line to just "pounding," as I think that would help the punchy effect that you seem to be going for there.
My one suggestion would be that you change the first line to just "pounding," as I think that would help the punchy effect that you seem to be going for there.

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re: Comment
1st Dec 2010 10:17am
thank you; yeah, it's meant to be a description of an anxiety attack, brought on by either too much caffeine or guilt or stress.. i'm glad you could relate to it, in the moment it feels so powerful, like it's going to take you, but it never does, oddly enough! party why i couldn't put as much heaviness into it, it's never as powerful as it feels. (bullshit. i just can't describe my feelings as eloquently as i would like to. haha) i will change that line for sure, i think it deserves to at least have some consistency. your feedback's always appreciated, Jack. [:
confused
30th Nov 2010 11:24pm
Can't decide whether it's guilt or paranoia.
Not as sharp as the others.
but I like it just the same.
Not as sharp as the others.
but I like it just the same.
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re: confused
30th Dec 2010 9:31pm
it was originally about my own experiences with paranoia. thank you for seeing into it. [:
I get it
I read one of your oldest to one of your newest poems....and like one of your most recent I already commented I think you knocked this one out of the park as well..guess you've always been good poet ..:) ...my wife could relate to this poem and unfortunately me at times.....thanks for the good read..
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re: I get it
5th May 2012 10:01am
it's unfortunate that you both can relate to this, but you have my sincere thanks for making your way all the way back here and actually enjoying the trip. [: bless you.
Re: Panic
18th Dec 2012 10:26pm
I have had times like this at work, usually when on my own, when I feel I've blown something and trouble's going to come. I fight it with prayer and breathing.
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re: Re: Panic
19th Dec 2012 1:46am
i did a lot of breathing with these moments. thanks for the visit... it's still weird seeing these oldies [: