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I killed a man today.
I spin under royal thralls of knowledge.
The key for truth buried behind my words;
derelict syllables gripping the shovel,
their dead-weight flung off
my tongue erratically.
Blood is my partner;
from page to page,
from eons of endless scrawl.
We relentlessly repel the odds,
living as Kings and Queens of all
tensely-strung thrumming hearts.
I killed a man today;
he was living inside my head.
Maliciously I showed him that
trespassers would not be tolerated,
heaving truth into his veins.
As expected it poisoned him breathless,
never to be heard of again.
Sometimes when the
night-silences cry wolf,
I accusingly blink at his
corpse in the corner.
Turning bruised eyes away;
I resume my place with Blood,
spinning until the light
carries us someplace thoughtless.
The key for truth buried behind my words;
derelict syllables gripping the shovel,
their dead-weight flung off
my tongue erratically.
Blood is my partner;
from page to page,
from eons of endless scrawl.
We relentlessly repel the odds,
living as Kings and Queens of all
tensely-strung thrumming hearts.
I killed a man today;
he was living inside my head.
Maliciously I showed him that
trespassers would not be tolerated,
heaving truth into his veins.
As expected it poisoned him breathless,
never to be heard of again.
Sometimes when the
night-silences cry wolf,
I accusingly blink at his
corpse in the corner.
Turning bruised eyes away;
I resume my place with Blood,
spinning until the light
carries us someplace thoughtless.
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Re: I killed a man today.
Anonymous
16th Jan 2013 7:23pm
Chilling poem, sounds like a black widow spider waiting in her web (mind you I mean this in a good sense)...Very dark write this is, nicely done
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16th Jan 2013 7:42pm
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Anonymous
16th Jan 2013 7:59pm
A cool read.
Seems to end on a positive note, then again, not quite.
Fave lines:
*The key for truth buried behind my words;
*heaving truth into his veins
Interesting how the last word in your poem "thoughtless" is used in a non-adverbial way...very stylistic.
Pen on, S.
Thanks for the share :-)
Cheers
Tidespotter
Seems to end on a positive note, then again, not quite.
Fave lines:
*The key for truth buried behind my words;
*heaving truth into his veins
Interesting how the last word in your poem "thoughtless" is used in a non-adverbial way...very stylistic.
Pen on, S.
Thanks for the share :-)
Cheers
Tidespotter
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16th Jan 2013 8:19pm
Re: I killed a man today.
Anonymous
16th Jan 2013 9:11pm
I, too, love the concepts! Perfect title & this:
I killed a man today;
he was living inside my head.
Maliciously I showed him that
trespassers would not be tolerated,
heaving truth into his veins.
As expected it poisoned him breathless,
never to be heard of again.
Those 'trespassers' can be such a problem. lol Somehow, I think I can relate to this. The last stanza, too, is fabulous! :)
Carlene
I killed a man today;
he was living inside my head.
Maliciously I showed him that
trespassers would not be tolerated,
heaving truth into his veins.
As expected it poisoned him breathless,
never to be heard of again.
Those 'trespassers' can be such a problem. lol Somehow, I think I can relate to this. The last stanza, too, is fabulous! :)
Carlene
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16th Jan 2013 9:21pm
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16th Jan 2013 10:18pm
A journey for a reader, getting inside the mind
of the Scribbler, a treat!!
Best wishes
Ricecake
of the Scribbler, a treat!!
Best wishes
Ricecake
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16th Jan 2013 10:20pm
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17th Jan 2013 3:14pm
I dwelled on many things; finally for me Blood represented itself, I suppose. Blood can give life or take it away with lethal noncommittal. Blood is powerful, and I am just as under his influence as any other person. Therefor I felt that he would make a perfectly brutal partner.
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