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Father
Every move I make.
Every breath I take.
Every word I say.
Criticism every day.
Not saying I love you anymore.
You made me fall to the floor.
Outside in the pouring rain.
I remember the day you went insane.
And since you came back,
I've kept my emotions tightly packed.
And when I saw you cry,
I'd wished I could just die.
I don't like our talks.
For when we do,my mind just walks.
I really don't know why I bother,
Dealing with you, My insane father.
Every breath I take.
Every word I say.
Criticism every day.
Not saying I love you anymore.
You made me fall to the floor.
Outside in the pouring rain.
I remember the day you went insane.
And since you came back,
I've kept my emotions tightly packed.
And when I saw you cry,
I'd wished I could just die.
I don't like our talks.
For when we do,my mind just walks.
I really don't know why I bother,
Dealing with you, My insane father.
Published 14th Jan 2013
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14th Jan 2013 3:17am
I like the constant flow that's retained throughout the poem. The poem is concise and has a clear message. "I don't like our talks.
For when we do,my mind just walks.
I really don't know why I bother,
Dealing with you, My insane father." There's a kind of love that you retain with your parents and they'd have to do something extreme to put out that flame of love and for you to say you're done.
For when we do,my mind just walks.
I really don't know why I bother,
Dealing with you, My insane father." There's a kind of love that you retain with your parents and they'd have to do something extreme to put out that flame of love and for you to say you're done.
14th Jan 2013 3:54am
Very bold and forward...i like it...the tone, structure and words all go together nicely...let those emotions out! dnt bottle them! very nice piece...
