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Gabriel
I touched the first star
Created cities from salt
Delivered the news to mary
I was loved by all
The first of my kind
But I was pushed aside
Now he's got his little toys
We are silenced by the creator
His throne echoed the word
The insects became his first love
I've been pushed in second place
We are silenced by the creator
I helped create your face
Stripped your rib from a man
That indent left on your lower chin
I moved to recite your prayer
Everything I had was lost
My depth of being was in question
When I asked not to be ignored
He delivered me into hell
The first of my kind
But I was pushed aside
Now he's got his little toys
We are silenced by the creator
His throne echoed the word
The insects became his first love
I've been pushed in second place
We are silenced by the creator
I was not an abomination
I suffered through the first war
Fighting for control against my brother
All I wanted was to be loved again
I know who we are
We delivered every word
But it doesn't mean I agree
I was once loved by all
The first of my kind
But I was pushed aside
Now he's got his little toys
We are silenced by the creator
His throne echoed in the word
The insects became his first love
I've been pushed in second place
We are silenced by the creator
Yes I was silenced from the start
Created cities from salt
Delivered the news to mary
I was loved by all
The first of my kind
But I was pushed aside
Now he's got his little toys
We are silenced by the creator
His throne echoed the word
The insects became his first love
I've been pushed in second place
We are silenced by the creator
I helped create your face
Stripped your rib from a man
That indent left on your lower chin
I moved to recite your prayer
Everything I had was lost
My depth of being was in question
When I asked not to be ignored
He delivered me into hell
The first of my kind
But I was pushed aside
Now he's got his little toys
We are silenced by the creator
His throne echoed the word
The insects became his first love
I've been pushed in second place
We are silenced by the creator
I was not an abomination
I suffered through the first war
Fighting for control against my brother
All I wanted was to be loved again
I know who we are
We delivered every word
But it doesn't mean I agree
I was once loved by all
The first of my kind
But I was pushed aside
Now he's got his little toys
We are silenced by the creator
His throne echoed in the word
The insects became his first love
I've been pushed in second place
We are silenced by the creator
Yes I was silenced from the start
Published 13th Jan 2013
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13th Jan 2013 1:25am
way to many repetitions my friend, really not needed, I get the message, but the repetition slows me down, poetry is funny in that most who want to write don't write honestly, just be honest and let it come out naturally, first mistake a young poet makes is that they try to impress.
13th Jan 2013 4:17am
ReneVelez I appreciate your honesty. I'm always happy to hear opinions about my musing. It's all I'm asking for when I post my writing. But I'm no poet and don't consider myself to be. If anything I'd like my work to be seen as songwriting. I love to challenge myself whenever I write. I rarely like to write something humorous cause I just don't feel the connection. But I know not everyone will like what I write. I am truly proud of writing this song and it's message. I wouldn't change a thing. I'm sorry if you found it repetitive. But thank you for your opinion.
