Can You See the Veil?

I love it... I can feel the emotion and power you put into this poem... Its... Amazing.

WOW. I hope this isn't true. I don't understand it completely but it is disturbing. Good write.

Hmm what parts don't you understand so I can work on fixing that next time around.

I'm sorry. It very well might be me. sometimes I have s hard time with understanding  poetry.

All because of leather boots
On legs that wear them wrong
Universal gender bender

Not a criminal of beauty
Who gets embellished for snakes
I'm to sober for this shit

"All because of leather boots
On legs that wear them wrong
Universal gender bender"

The implication I was trying to get across was that he was first attracted by leather boots. Leather boots more often than less, are worn by men. Gender bender was used so I could try to explain the conflicting actions of trying to be both feminine and masculine, but legs that wear them wrong was to show that the feminine side would always dominate.

"Not a criminal of beauty
Who gets embellished for snakes
I'm to sober for this shit"

I can't really explain this without adding a few other lines so lets use,

"Who's to say what's right?
Not a criminal of beauty
Who gets embellished for snakes
I'm to sober for this shit
And I'm thirsting for venom"

The entire poem is based on willingly becoming dominated by a man to the point of always making sure he's satisfied physically and also by the womens appearance. But it's also about the struggle of her starting to resent being submissive and trying find her masculinity.

I tried to make it all connect with that inner struggle. A snake representing a man.

I love obscure poetry, so naturally I'm inclined to write like that. I have a fear my writing might more closely resemble difficult poetry so I'm happy to explain this and grow as a poet. I know I need to think more carefully about my words next time I try something like this. I hope this makes more sense and clears up confusion.

As much as we may try to live without a veil, there are times it is needed. Emotions HAVE to be released at some point.

I like the explosion at the end... unfettered release.

i can't put my finger on a certain line. this whole piece seems very honest and well written. it brings about feeling i'd rather not discuss in this venue.......well done sixxx.......

very very good...wonderfully written...emotionally bound..with deepness the the core...love it! keep up the good work!

I'm really seeing the veil in this poem. I liked it.

-Evan