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precious eyes
they look
like they're flirting
it isn't right
but then
i have no claims
on the man
their laughter
i n n o c e n t
or not
discourage me
forcing me to feel
i n s i g n i f i c a n t
perhaps, i
protest too much
but darn it all
those precious eyes
of his
did court me
for a while
like they're flirting
it isn't right
but then
i have no claims
on the man
their laughter
i n n o c e n t
or not
discourage me
forcing me to feel
i n s i g n i f i c a n t
perhaps, i
protest too much
but darn it all
those precious eyes
of his
did court me
for a while
Published 27th Dec 2012
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27th Dec 2012 4:47pm
Lol they did indeed, this is a great observational write
great stuff
marcus
great stuff
marcus
27th Dec 2012 5:20pm
27th Dec 2012 4:51pm
I know this feeling well lol,
watching it sucks, but like you said you have no claims so.......
nice write!
watching it sucks, but like you said you have no claims so.......
nice write!
27th Dec 2012 5:21pm
27th Dec 2012 5:10pm
One can only make one feel insignificant if one allows one too lol ;)
Lovely expression and write Faith. :)
Lovely expression and write Faith. :)
27th Dec 2012 5:23pm
That's true, Magdalena, however, it's how i felt when i experienced it which led to the birth of the poem! Thanks for your wonderful comments. I always enjoy what you have to say.
27th Dec 2012 5:13pm
Loved the ending.."those precious eyes
of his
did court me
for a while"--Personally I enjoy the courting process even without claims!! :)
of his
did court me
for a while"--Personally I enjoy the courting process even without claims!! :)
27th Dec 2012 5:25pm
Yes, it is enjoyable even without havng any claims on the man. Thank you for your wonderful remarks. I really appreciate them. :)
27th Dec 2012 6:29pm
28th Dec 2012 2:21pm
Anonymous
- Edited 27th Dec 2012 7:41pm
27th Dec 2012 7:40pm
Very interesting poem, Faith. I particularly love the last stanza! Nice one! :)
Carlene
Carlene
28th Dec 2012 2:21pm
Anonymous
28th Dec 2012 00:51am
Well, man who turns his eyes away from such a sweetheart like you, doesn't deserve you. :)
28th Dec 2012 2:22pm
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28th Dec 2012 1:17am
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28th Dec 2012 2:24pm
29th Dec 2012 5:04am
Oh how I love this, Faith! I could see the story unfold clearly! Nicely penned! :)
29th Dec 2012 5:50pm
26th Apr 2024 11:44pm
eyes are everything. That to me is so important. A woman's eyes that are beautiful are hypnotic to me. I'm in a trance. Great poem
27th Apr 2024 00:07am
The eyes do have it going on don't they? Once again, Thank you for checking out some of my older works. It's so nice of you!
27th Apr 2024 00:10am
yes they do. That's my link for falling for a woman, through their eyes.
As I mentioned earlier. Your a good writer and I would love to review everything of yours but you have quite a lot here.
Your welcome my friend. I wrote you a message earlier through e-mail.
As I mentioned earlier. Your a good writer and I would love to review everything of yours but you have quite a lot here.
Your welcome my friend. I wrote you a message earlier through e-mail.
27th Apr 2024 00:12am
27th Apr 2024 00:13am
