coarse and unrefined

Not sure about the italics; words with fuck have enough emphasis and so does the 'breathe', it more than stands alone.

Very gently done: 'quiet covers'.

Have a love/hate relationship with love poems, this must be the love side.

Perfectly spaced and cut, Betty. The rest is just fucking art

I like "holyfuck" italicised, it indicates a coined term and I'm kinda dim like that, lol.  

You know, I looked at 'em, and looked at 'em, and I think you might be right, but I left 'em italicized simply because I liked 'em.

KICKass feedback. Thank you for it. Betty

A pure hug, then.  No cookie monsters PJs (loved!) or lacy stuff.

"the pores of my skin
are screaming
to taste you tonight"

Nothing coarse and unrefined here.  

Umm, constructive feedback - if you press me, I'll say you used "tonight" three times, and you could get away with only using it the once (the first time).  But that's just nit-picking; it's really a very enjoyable read.

OK, I did delete two 'tonight's. I think it does read cleaner, so thank's for the nit-picking!

A pure hug. Yeah. I like that.

Thank you, Atakti, 'preciate the r/r and feedback.
Betty

Still, you made me drop my cookie....

Five second rule, my man! Pick up your cookie. (I ain't sweeping that shit up. Seriously.)

Thanks, as always, turtle.
B

As loving as a poem gets with just a hint of sex thrown in to flavor the love.  Well done.

Thanks 3J, glad you liked it.
Happy writing, Betty

Your reviews are made of awesome. I love your enthusiasm for the written word.

Thanks, Gabriel.

Betty

Hell ! There is nothing on the planet that can not be refined down to its last thread ( including poetry lol )

But... I do not find this coarse at all, quite the opposite actually.

It is intimate, lovely, and quite charming in my opinion.  :)

Beautiful contrast between your title, and verse.  :)

Thanks Maggie!

I'm glad you liked the contrast. (I liked the contrast. It's like, what the hell is this fluffy-bunny crap, don't I write porn? So it's sort of poking at myself with a stick.)

Thank you for your lovely read/review.
Happy writing, Betty

Ha!

I have never had qualms with porn. All I ask is that it is good porn. Frankly if you see one dick you have seen them all pretty much. Now a dick that rises for fluffy-bunny jammies ? You have my attention Hun ;) lol

When my polyandry bill passes congress, will you be my second wife? (Shakira is going to be my first wife.)

That totally made me laugh.

A dick that'll rise for your fluffy-bunny shit, when it has seen everything you got and still says 'Hi! How's it goin"'' yeah, that's one you want to take for a ride.

Just sayin'.

Thanks again for the kickass comment, Mags.
Betty

*grins*

Can I bring my husband along ? He isn't big on bunny-fuzzy, but he is interesting non the less ;)

lol

Does he do dishes? I really want to be a cult leader, or like, a commune-nut-job, but I don't want to do dishes.

He can join Bettyville as your first husband (you can have five... but really, who the hell would want five? That's like, hell.) and unlimited wives.

(Because wives probably won't fart so much as dudes. That's really the only reason I'm all for a society of chicks; girls smell better.)


 

OMG ! and LMAO !

You're fucked on the dishes Darlin ! BUT.... the rest might raise at least one eyebrow.

I will pay close attention to the nether regions and keep you posted ok ?  lol

Very beautiful and sensational!

Great line:
"peel off my fuzzy
cookie-monster pajama bottoms
and little white tank top,
slip under the
quiet covers,
and silently curl my body to
the outside of yours,
so that your strong back
is formed to my front"

Blake

Thank for the r/r, Blake.
Betty

Yes the desire to be subsumed by a larger belonging. I do see this in you from time to time. The structure is small and comfortable. The language is small and comfortable. Disarming and consise at the same time. Big job for a short piece. Short job well done. Nice piece.

Peace
Bragg

Thanks man. You put it beautifully.
"the desire to be subsumed by a larger belonging"

Glad you liked it. Thanks, B

I'm glad to had started following you. This is so hot and perfect. I love it (not just saying that either) really good must add

Thanks, Gigi! Glad you liked it.
B