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Lunch Break
Born deaf. Talks funny;
she's drowning on syllables
that she can only feel.
She was an owl
in another life, or world.
We've never spoke;
she doesn't speak much
and it's better that way.
Her cambered back is precise,
allowing glory to bulge everywhere
as she walks out of herself;
confident and timid.
Razor eye for colours
and always smells how she looks:
enchanting yet unconquerable
and when she smiles.
When she smiles
the world dies, disappears.
The most astral voice imaginable
could only befoul this.
All of mankind before and after her
are marred.
God's very own caryatid in motion
and he dooms each man
who surveils her long enough
to see the earth languish around her.
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Re: Lunch Break
3rd Dec 2012 9:39pm
Who do you read Mr. A ? I can always tell someone who reads poetry, as well as write it.
You really are a solid writer. I hope you know that. Perfect ? No... But it is quite easy for me to see you pretty damn close to it someday. :)
You really are a solid writer. I hope you know that. Perfect ? No... But it is quite easy for me to see you pretty damn close to it someday. :)
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re: Re: Lunch Break
4th Dec 2012 8:40pm
I could probably give a more narrow answer if you asked who I didn't read. Old favourites are Hughes, Blake. More recent; Jack Gilbert, but I read what I can, as long as it doesn't hurt my eyes. :)
Perfect will never come, but close(in anyone's opinion) sounds good.
Thank you for your feedback, Maggie.
Perfect will never come, but close(in anyone's opinion) sounds good.
Thank you for your feedback, Maggie.
Re: Lunch Break
3rd Dec 2012 9:59pm
Maggie beat me here.. lmao. Oh my god i'm going to die. Yes sir you are solid. now you got these two crazy faithful women here to stroke you shall we mud wrestle? Mr A. I bow.. (looks at maggie and folds my arms and runs).. =)
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re: Re: Lunch Break
4th Dec 2012 8:42pm
Re: Lunch Break
3rd Dec 2012 10:15pm
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4th Dec 2012 8:43pm
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3rd Dec 2012 10:27pm
Such lines will make the girls swoon, MrA.
Be careful of us... We may want more
Much, much more.
Compliments to you and your immaculate craftsmanship.
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4th Dec 2012 8:45pm
Now, violet,
are you swooning? If not, then I give up.
You're far too kind. Cheers.
are you swooning? If not, then I give up.
You're far too kind. Cheers.
Re: Lunch Break
3rd Dec 2012 10:36pm
"Razor eye for colours
and always smells how she looks:
enchanting yet unconquerable"
Great write Mr A
and always smells how she looks:
enchanting yet unconquerable"
Great write Mr A
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re: Re: Lunch Break
4th Dec 2012 8:47pm
Re: Lunch Break
4th Dec 2012 3:05pm
quite
Xlent,
as
is par for any Alptraumation portrait....
love stanzaaaaaa#3
Xlent,
as
is par for any Alptraumation portrait....
love stanzaaaaaa#3
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4th Dec 2012 8:49pm
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