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Bitter
A contemptuous and spiteful nature has taken hold of me
It envelops my mind in a wasteland of malignant cynicism
Emotion and compassion a twisted and defiled mutation
Leaving a taste in my mouth that is unpleasant, at best
My smile often becomes a false interpretation of pleasure
Finding little humor in every day pursuit
Grey walls closing in around me with chains of dissatisfaction
I grow weary of the facade I've held on to for so long
It's slipping through my fingers faster than tears
Tears of those I choose to hurt with dull fascination
Bitterly resenting anyone who has the audacity to assume
That empathy still resides within my barren conscience
Sociopath
I don't care for the subtleties of a weak breed
Nurturing thoughts of tenderness and so-called understanding
Oblivious to the disease of apathetic mall-content
Relying on the heart to guide them in their vain struggles
Facts and calculations are my rationalization
Too many conflicting emotions equate a messy execution
I choose to disregard them entirely as what they are
Pathetic validation and excuse for one's own short-comings
I no longer seek the companionship of my peers
I never really got that far anyway, the concept eluding me
Friendship a complicated maze when it shouldn't be
My preferred neutrality an accusation of disloyalty
I've learned over the past years of self-inflicted solitude
That people are disposable, easily forgotten
A transient irritation that is best left unscratched
As inconsequential as a piece of garbage fluttering down the street
If that makes me the same, it matters little to me
Purpose seems to have left me to decay and wither
My surroundings color-bleached and uninspiring
Spreading malice to all those who happen to come by
It envelops my mind in a wasteland of malignant cynicism
Emotion and compassion a twisted and defiled mutation
Leaving a taste in my mouth that is unpleasant, at best
My smile often becomes a false interpretation of pleasure
Finding little humor in every day pursuit
Grey walls closing in around me with chains of dissatisfaction
I grow weary of the facade I've held on to for so long
It's slipping through my fingers faster than tears
Tears of those I choose to hurt with dull fascination
Bitterly resenting anyone who has the audacity to assume
That empathy still resides within my barren conscience
Sociopath
I don't care for the subtleties of a weak breed
Nurturing thoughts of tenderness and so-called understanding
Oblivious to the disease of apathetic mall-content
Relying on the heart to guide them in their vain struggles
Facts and calculations are my rationalization
Too many conflicting emotions equate a messy execution
I choose to disregard them entirely as what they are
Pathetic validation and excuse for one's own short-comings
I no longer seek the companionship of my peers
I never really got that far anyway, the concept eluding me
Friendship a complicated maze when it shouldn't be
My preferred neutrality an accusation of disloyalty
I've learned over the past years of self-inflicted solitude
That people are disposable, easily forgotten
A transient irritation that is best left unscratched
As inconsequential as a piece of garbage fluttering down the street
If that makes me the same, it matters little to me
Purpose seems to have left me to decay and wither
My surroundings color-bleached and uninspiring
Spreading malice to all those who happen to come by
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Re: Bitter
2nd Nov 2012 1:18am
This is an interesting take on describing someone. Ms. Dark, I enjoyed the darkness of this and your signature extensive vocabulary usage.
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Re: Bitter
2nd Nov 2012 1:52am
Bitter, to me, is just another flavor to rotate through.....
Relying on the heart to guide them in their vain struggles
This line made me laugh for some reason....all struggles are vain....since we all die. I'm more concerned with what I am living for, than what I am dying for.
Your piece is making me think of stages of my life...20's..not so fun....30's oh God not again.....40's not so bad.....50's thank God for that....better....
Relying on the heart to guide them in their vain struggles
This line made me laugh for some reason....all struggles are vain....since we all die. I'm more concerned with what I am living for, than what I am dying for.
Your piece is making me think of stages of my life...20's..not so fun....30's oh God not again.....40's not so bad.....50's thank God for that....better....
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2nd Nov 2012 2:43am
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2nd Nov 2012 3:05am
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2nd Nov 2012 3:24am
This poem is oh so bitter. Something of where malevolent emotions take hold of me and I'm ready to take a trip to the other side. Fantastic poem by the great dark poet, that is my cousin.
-Evan
-Evan
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Re: Bitter
2nd Nov 2012 7:34am
Wow -- what a great poem. It speaks to the inner bitter sociopath in all of us -- or maybe it's just me. But -- ironically -- I feel less alone when I read it -- even the opposite of alone. It can't just be me -- I'm sure everyone would respond this way. Damn you poetic sorceress! Is it right that I should feel so energized and excited and refreshed by this poem -- that it should give me such soothing pleasure and relief to read it? Did you have to weave the magical precision of your spell so thoroughly that I would be so strangely entranced by it? Oh well what can you do? I'll have to learn to live with it -- because I want to keep reading it.
Gurudev
Gurudev
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2nd Nov 2012 6:07pm
Poetic sorceress!? I adore that, as well as your compliment. I'm glad my poem gave you comfort and able to make you feel less alone. I hope it invokes in you a great muse. :)
Thanks you kindly little squirrel.
AlwaysCaliban
Thanks you kindly little squirrel.
AlwaysCaliban
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3rd Nov 2012 5:13pm
The little squirrel IS my great Muse. Isn't it obvious? He brought me here to read your cool poem.
Gurudev
Gurudev
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2nd Nov 2012 10:50am
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2nd Nov 2012 4:55pm
Its more than beautiful. Itys bwatiful.
One of the most enchanting dark poems i have read.
One of the most enchanting dark poems i have read.
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re: Re: Bitter
2nd Nov 2012 6:09pm
It seems alot of people find this poem to be enchanting, funny, when I was writing it I thought it would have the opposite affect. Thank you for your "Bwatiful" compliments. ;)
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2nd Nov 2012 7:11pm
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Re: Bitter
6th Nov 2012 2:57am
Calling "facts and calculations" "rarionalizations" is not what "rationalization" means. Why do you name yourself "Sociopath?" It would seem labels are about as misleading as one can get, if he/she accepts the label. You have to be more than your remarkable poem says. Otherwise you would not be able to reflect on yourself so insightfully. I liked the poem very much. Your gifts for metaphors and consistence are wonderful.
marcella1
marcella1
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6th Nov 2012 7:42pm
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Anonymous
12th Nov 2012 9:32am
Very relate-able. A sentiment I've lived and sometimes loved. I can definitely find myself in the words laid bare here. A really well executed write. Thanks for sharing.
Peace, Indie
Peace, Indie
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Anonymous
15th Nov 2012 9:50am
My oh my AlwaysCaliban, quite the crowd here!
Your poem, I too relate with it's.. sentiments. I call it jaded really.. being shunned and ignored often results to a deep, 'bitter' resentment towards others and a strong hostility to those you do not deem relative. I'd say I've experienced it myself, ah, very nicely done AlwaysCaliban, this is a wonderful write, please continue writing!
Your poem, I too relate with it's.. sentiments. I call it jaded really.. being shunned and ignored often results to a deep, 'bitter' resentment towards others and a strong hostility to those you do not deem relative. I'd say I've experienced it myself, ah, very nicely done AlwaysCaliban, this is a wonderful write, please continue writing!
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15th Nov 2012 10:12am
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Where is MY Annie and what have you done with her? haha...This is definitely not Sears-the softer side of you, type ink! lmbo...But im intrigued by this vice of writing from you. Nevertheless....beautifully dark! Bittersweet; pleasure alloyed with pain. :-)
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Re: Bitter
4th Dec 2012 7:15am
Your Writing is amazing, even though Ive only read a few of your pieces. I'm liking this darkness that you show. its not that twisted im gonna kill you in your sleep darkness but just the same its not the I hate the world and choose to stay inside myself kind of darkness either...i dont know what to call it and thats why i like it. it shouldnt be called anything except "Bitter". The more I read the more i am driven to keep reading, i dont find that in many peoples writing anymore but you seem to have touched something in my mind and I dont want to stop reading till i have read all of your writing. You are gifted! and anyone who may say different is most likely jealous of your Mind! Great stuff!
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Re: Bitter
5th Dec 2012 4:53am
A bitter sociopath... gee you're a lot of fun. Just fuckin around. Seriously, this is damn good, but I think you know that. I don't think there is any 'critique' for this because well, it exists just fine the way it probably spilled forth from you, each word & every line having a purpose. This is very dark & parts of it are disturbing, but I'm a firm believer in writing out ones' darkest thoughts so as not to actually inflict them upon the world. On a personal note-being bitter is a reflection of the past, don't ever let your past control your present...because really, within bitterness there is weakness. ----blah, blah----
Great write !
Oooh...btw...did you mean to have mall-content instead of mal-content ?! If so---you're super rad & other stuff.
Great write !
Oooh...btw...did you mean to have mall-content instead of mal-content ?! If so---you're super rad & other stuff.
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23rd Dec 2012 11:14am
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30th Dec 2012 10:31pm
i like this type of poetry, expressing everything dark inside with bleak imagery.
i found this part powerful
"Facts and calculations are my rationalization
Too many conflicting emotions equate a messy execution
I choose to disregard them entirely as what they are
Pathetic validation and excuse for one's own short-comings"
this is the first poem i read written by you, so i am not sure what is your style. but you may wanna think about using sounds to increase the emphasis on the parts you sense as more powerful. this is just a suggestion, but i think you have the ability take such amazing poems to a much higher level.
i found this part powerful
"Facts and calculations are my rationalization
Too many conflicting emotions equate a messy execution
I choose to disregard them entirely as what they are
Pathetic validation and excuse for one's own short-comings"
this is the first poem i read written by you, so i am not sure what is your style. but you may wanna think about using sounds to increase the emphasis on the parts you sense as more powerful. this is just a suggestion, but i think you have the ability take such amazing poems to a much higher level.
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Re: Bitter
9th Jan 2013 10:40pm
Hmmm again I'm not sure what kind of critique I could give you. It feels kind of backwards that I critique anything of yours since you're so much better than I am. All I can say is that this one came off too bitter for my taste (no pun intended). That's just your style though so I can't really criticize that. What I will say is you should try and make the reader feel you; feel the same way you do. To me this just made me feel like I shouldn't bother you; that I'm not good to even approach you or talk to you. Think the other way around. Make the reader hate humanity too, not themselves. That's all I can really say haha.
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9th Jan 2013 10:54pm
Darn! I would have liked to think that witty pun was intended, haha. Thank you for the feedback, I will take what you said to heart.