The New System Of Things

...really believe all this nonsense for your own sake. This has a lyrical feel to it tho - but could probably be improved - second stanza seems a bit awkward and I'm not sure some of the rhymes aren't a bit too obvious.

You know what, I write these poems for me not for anyone else.  I would appreciate no more comments from the diaper section.

...there's a brand new feature coming soon here, which will allow you to select a 'no comments' option before posting a poem if you so wish. As a furious athiest who believes religion is the most serious problem currently afflicting our planet I felt compelled to give my opinion, firstly regarding the content of your poem and then on its composition. I understand you are new, but it wouldn't seem unreasonable for you to expect you might receive comments when posting verse on a public website. Of course, you may not always agree with what people think about your work, but then that's the way the cookie crumbles sometimes.
Please feel free to comment on my own poem "God's a Serial Killer" http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/2042/ should you wish to even any scores you think might be outstanding.  Best ~ Abra

"I write these poems for me not for anyone else."

Obviously you don't believe that because you posted the poem
for other people to read.

Remember: God notices even tiny lies.  I will pray for you.

Go ahead and pray for me, because God has already condemned me and I don't care anymore!!!

I love the last two stanza's; so simple and moving, truly artful. And I can appreciate the courage of your vision here, Stacey.

I actually wondered if that floppy third stanza might benefit from a dash of spice
something along these lines perhaps...

Guilty women will be entombed
all you sinners shall be doomed
when Earth will be no more
Heaven shall be mine
Hell will be yours

hmm...

I actually like that.  I wish I'd thought of those words.

haters will always do what they do best