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Split Personality
[i]My words like plastic
is a bag over my head suffocating me
a rubber ball bouning off the walls
slamming me in the head bashing my skull.
"Let the truth sink in"
I hear some where inside me
though it hurts like jagged teeth
slicing, cutting making me bleed internally.
i've been living the life of the living dead
not feeling anything
I can't remember the last time I cried or felt anything real
hollow words slap me in the face.
my inner beast knocks me on my ass
screaming at me
"I will kill you if you don't fight back!"
"You've made baby steps before Bitch!
"It's time to make a real stand before I stuff those plastic words down your throat and choke you with them!"
"I would love to watch you turn blue eyes bulging
rather then hear you utter another hollow ash filled word."
is a bag over my head suffocating me
a rubber ball bouning off the walls
slamming me in the head bashing my skull.
"Let the truth sink in"
I hear some where inside me
though it hurts like jagged teeth
slicing, cutting making me bleed internally.
i've been living the life of the living dead
not feeling anything
I can't remember the last time I cried or felt anything real
hollow words slap me in the face.
my inner beast knocks me on my ass
screaming at me
"I will kill you if you don't fight back!"
"You've made baby steps before Bitch!
"It's time to make a real stand before I stuff those plastic words down your throat and choke you with them!"
"I would love to watch you turn blue eyes bulging
rather then hear you utter another hollow ash filled word."
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Re: Split Personality
26th Oct 2012 6:41pm
WOW love the anger and aggression in this. Fighting self and the back and forth, feel that all the time. great piece
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26th Oct 2012 7:14pm
Glad you could relate to this poem it makes me feel not so alone in feeling this way..ty peace Crim
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26th Oct 2012 7:15pm
Re: Split Personality
An impressive expression of introspection. The best poetry is written about the person within who can only be seen through inner eyes. Each time you reflect from within you explode with the colors of your soul... It is sad that only through such deep pain that we can see ourselves for who we really are. The fluff of life conceals whatever we choose to stuff behind it, until the fluff gets old and matted down like old pillows soaked in sweat and oil. You have always been remarkable in my eyes, now you are an artist extraordinaire! Baby steps lead to a staircase that I understand has twelve more to climb. The thing about baby steps is, though you don't get far, they teach you how to put one foot in front of the other... JJ
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Dear JJ you give the most beautiful in depth comments thank you kind soul..this poem came from anger and pain at my constant getting to my feet and then falling down again and realising though i'm afraid.. I need to allow myself to feel some thing..I tried the 12 steps for awhile but I kept having to say i'm still drinking..I wasn't going to lie about it..I was just hoping some wisdom would sink in..it's been three days now sober and at least i'm feeling anger which stems I think from pain..ty JJ again..wishing you peace Crim
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27th Oct 2012 8:40pm
It's not often I can say "anger is good", but today is a good day for anger. Wite an angry poem, even if it is just about bird-doo on the winshield of your car... Release the fury one way or another...
I am on my way out of town for a couple of days. I will have my iPhone so I can get on the site, but it is very hard for me to see, so I don't do much when I am on it. Tuesday is court for the eviction and we are having Hurrican Sandy Tuesday, so I don't know if I will even be able to get on line.
Talk with you soon, Peace, er-ah, ANGER!
JJ
I am on my way out of town for a couple of days. I will have my iPhone so I can get on the site, but it is very hard for me to see, so I don't do much when I am on it. Tuesday is court for the eviction and we are having Hurrican Sandy Tuesday, so I don't know if I will even be able to get on line.
Talk with you soon, Peace, er-ah, ANGER!
JJ
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Re: Split Personality
27th Oct 2012 00:59am
The battle with self is such an exciting journey.... NEVER a dull moment.... This selection was felt close to home... I identify with your state of being... Will be adding you to my favorites ;)
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27th Oct 2012 1:04am
Thank you lovely soul for your kind and insightful comment..again welcome to DU..peace Crim :)
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Anonymous
27th Oct 2012 9:38am
I can definitely relate here, crim
Nice work.
Strider
Nice work.
Strider
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29th Oct 2012 5:49pm
Re: Split Personality
27th Oct 2012 10:03am
I at times get really mad at myself and shout in my head.
Very expressive and determined Crim. A great write. :)
Very expressive and determined Crim. A great write. :)
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re: Re: Split Personality
29th Oct 2012 5:50pm
ty Magdalena for relating to this poem..I don't feel so alone in my feelings now..wishing you peace Crim
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Anonymous
29th Oct 2012 2:21pm
This is great!
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24th Mar 2013 4:07am
ty Blake i'm sorry lovely one that you have these days lol..wishing you peace Crim
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Anonymous
24th Mar 2013 4:02am
You do vent gracefully. Well felt words. :)
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6th Dec 2013 1:09am
This piece is great! I can sense your anger, feel your struggle. It's this inner battle that fuels your words. Stay inspired!
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