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Hell's Hello
On my back
On the filthy floor
On my way to Hell's front door
In certain judgement
In front of the Keeper
"In" said the white-faced Reeper
I look back one last time
I forget what I once knew
I hear Him say "I welcome you..."[/font]
On the filthy floor
On my way to Hell's front door
In certain judgement
In front of the Keeper
"In" said the white-faced Reeper
I look back one last time
I forget what I once knew
I hear Him say "I welcome you..."[/font]
Published 25th May 2010
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27th May 2010 2:18am
well this is the first one Ive read of yours and I dig it.. simple short and a lot jammed into a few words.. I usually like to do the same thing.. people get bored reading long poems or short stories (st at least I do) so short and sweet is perfect.. I think the poem flows well and though I dot usually like rhyming poetry (except maybe the lyrics of nine inch nails heh) i think you did a good job here.. cheers
4th Jun 2010 7:29pm
i liked the visions it portrays: last rites, last thoughts, and the beginning of a neverending nightmare. i'd love to see what comes lyrically after the welcome credits....
17th Jun 2010 5:12pm
17th Jun 2010 5:14pm
14th Jul 2010 6:43pm
this is a very good short poem n i agree with the other guys that it would be good at the beginning of a horror movie hahah :D
good work
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good work
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14th Jul 2010 9:27pm
thanks! if this was the beginning of a horror short, i couldn't IMAGINE the rest!
16th Sep 2010 5:20pm
16th Sep 2010 5:20pm
26th Aug 2011 1:22am
I enjoyed it.
A quick, straightforward read still enjoyable.
The patterns are nice even though I'm not one for this style of rhyme.
A quick, straightforward read still enjoyable.
The patterns are nice even though I'm not one for this style of rhyme.
26th Aug 2011 8:35pm
