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Stop the bullying
I cut myself today
couldn't take the pain I felt from the words they spewed from their blood red lips
you're ugly
fat
no one loves you
cheap slut
hoe ,they fuck you for free pussy
why you crying baby
does the truth hurt
each cut eased the words away
until I had seen nothing
felt nothing
I didn't even hear my mother crying over me
screaming
my baby why?why ? I love you please listen to me
you're so beautiful
don't leave me
I didn't hear her, I never heard her
I only always heard them
couldn't take the pain I felt from the words they spewed from their blood red lips
you're ugly
fat
no one loves you
cheap slut
hoe ,they fuck you for free pussy
why you crying baby
does the truth hurt
each cut eased the words away
until I had seen nothing
felt nothing
I didn't even hear my mother crying over me
screaming
my baby why?why ? I love you please listen to me
you're so beautiful
don't leave me
I didn't hear her, I never heard her
I only always heard them
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Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 5:43am
re: Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 5:53am
Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 5:52am
re: Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 5:53am
Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 6:09am
Beautiful and powerful, Gigi.
This really got the message across about how words can truly affect someone, and I really can relate with it. A beautiful write from a beautiful woman.
Stay beautiful darling. <3
This really got the message across about how words can truly affect someone, and I really can relate with it. A beautiful write from a beautiful woman.
Stay beautiful darling. <3
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re: Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 3:53pm
Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 6:14am
Hey gigi..the idea is concise and comes straight through. I enjoy the sentiment, and read through easily.
(well dont enjoy the sentiment itself, but the voice of the victim)
Couple little suggestions:
I would chop the title down- as I said the idea comes blaring through, the title feels a bit overdone. If you want the line,perhaps as an endnote,maybe even in italics
The second stanza "seen" I think should be had seen-or saw, check my math on that,ha
Last stanza,could drop the "no" and couple the first two lines, letting that last line stand alone.
Clearly just my opinion, but hafta talk shop sometimes...dig it tho mama, keep on keeping on
(well dont enjoy the sentiment itself, but the voice of the victim)
Couple little suggestions:
I would chop the title down- as I said the idea comes blaring through, the title feels a bit overdone. If you want the line,perhaps as an endnote,maybe even in italics
The second stanza "seen" I think should be had seen-or saw, check my math on that,ha
Last stanza,could drop the "no" and couple the first two lines, letting that last line stand alone.
Clearly just my opinion, but hafta talk shop sometimes...dig it tho mama, keep on keeping on
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re: Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 3:59pm
Thank you . Yeah titles pretty long . Don't know what to use I'll have to think on it. And I'll tidy it up Ty 1
Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 6:59am
I think this poem is just saddening. It shows your true feelings. Through reading this, I am able to get a glimpse into your life.
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re: Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 4:00pm
Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 9:21am
Miss Gigi... this gave me goosebumps.
The title seems a bit 'funny' though, maybe a simple comma could remedy this; 'Don't bully people, you don't just hurt them', your call though.
Other than that I think LightBaron gave you enough crit-back.
Honestly gave me chills, peace;)
The title seems a bit 'funny' though, maybe a simple comma could remedy this; 'Don't bully people, you don't just hurt them', your call though.
Other than that I think LightBaron gave you enough crit-back.
Honestly gave me chills, peace;)
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re: Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 4:01pm
Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 11:07am
Why do we listen to those who don't love us? Emotional vampires only want to draw blood and then we give it to them.....what power do they have? Strong subject well treated.
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re: Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 4:03pm
Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 1:19pm
Terrible subject that happens to often Gigi... Great write about the ugliness in life! Thank you sweetheart.
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re: Re: Don't bully people you don't just hurt them
16th Oct 2012 4:03pm
Re: Stop the bullying
16th Oct 2012 5:03pm
This poem is one of the reasons why DUP is so important. Where else can you find out about all the bullying and cutting and general abuse happening in the world, and then express your feelings about it even though you may not be the one experiencing it first hand? Exellent poem and the pic is just the right touch! JJ
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re: Re: Stop the bullying
16th Oct 2012 8:05pm
Yes it's very true. I've seen more bullying then I like. Thank you mr poetry man xoxo
Re: Stop the bullying
19th Oct 2012 5:37am
Whether a cycle repeating or an angry soul...haters will ever be with us. Strong piece, Gigi
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re: Re: Stop the bullying
19th Oct 2012 5:42am
Re: Stop the bullying
5th Nov 2012 7:58am
Re: Stop the bullying
Anonymous
13th Nov 2012 3:37am
I was bullied once by a gang of girls until I got fed up one day and kicked the shit out of the girl who started it all. Vendicated. . .maybe? Forgotten. . .never. Beautiful write, BFF;)
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Re: Stop the bullying
20th Nov 2012 11:36pm
This is so powerful! Very dear to me as my little boy is currently being bullied. Thank you for sharing this great piece.
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re: Re: Stop the bullying
21st Nov 2012 5:01am
Re: Stop the bullying
15th Jan 2013 7:56am
wow thats so sad, i used to cut to it became addictive :/ i havent cut in 4 months so thats a start
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re: Re: Stop the bullying
15th Jan 2013 7:58am
Re: Stop the bullying
2nd Mar 2013 3:01am
I really felt this poem. Brought back nasty memories. Picture made me look at my own arms, scars that fade slightly, but always remain.
You expressed it very well Ms. Gg
You expressed it very well Ms. Gg
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re: Re: Stop the bullying
2nd Mar 2013 3:47am