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I am dancing
in all the doors
of all the disco's
loving it
you are my super
woman
dancing in all the doors
of all the disco's
electric eyes
jazz hands cool
clean shit.....
rocksugar lover
dancing up
fire prints
beyond
wild blue-yonders
movement
love
diamonds
flowing
to
the
oceans
in all the doors
of all the disco's
loving it
you are my super
woman
dancing in all the doors
of all the disco's
electric eyes
jazz hands cool
clean shit.....
rocksugar lover
dancing up
fire prints
beyond
wild blue-yonders
movement
love
diamonds
flowing
to
the
oceans
Published 18th May 2010
| Edited 23rd Jan 2012
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18th May 2010 6:40pm
... I'm not sure about the last six lines altho the transition appears seamless... I'm wonderin if you could end this at flowing - only because "to the oceans" doesn't really float my disco boat as much as the rest of the poem. Just a thought.
19th May 2010 8:00am
hi. I know what you mean. my thoughts are around the oceans inside us. i guess i mean the transition from the physical to the emotional. great to hear you remember disco too!!
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26th May 2010 1:09am
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