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If I lie here
on blue and white striped sheets
maybe I'll build a life in this little hole
that I've dug myself into
and those days
when it's too hot under the covers
I'll sing myself to sleep
a lullaby of sugar and smoke
I think I'm just cheap fun
toyed with at no expense
led astray by wishbones and
broken promises
but I'll wander back onto the path
and quit dangling above
temptation's maw
and maybe
if I really want to
I can touch the ground too.
on blue and white striped sheets
maybe I'll build a life in this little hole
that I've dug myself into
and those days
when it's too hot under the covers
I'll sing myself to sleep
a lullaby of sugar and smoke
I think I'm just cheap fun
toyed with at no expense
led astray by wishbones and
broken promises
but I'll wander back onto the path
and quit dangling above
temptation's maw
and maybe
if I really want to
I can touch the ground too.
Published 15th Jul 2012
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19th Jul 2012 2:52pm
i know this means something... many things...
but i cant really tell you cause i haven't
the right words to say anything but, lovely!.
but i cant really tell you cause i haven't
the right words to say anything but, lovely!.
19th Jul 2012 6:20pm
Thanks a lot :)
It does mean many things, but I'm sure it depends on the reader themselves. I'm glad you find such depth to my poem. Thanks again!
It does mean many things, but I'm sure it depends on the reader themselves. I'm glad you find such depth to my poem. Thanks again!
21st Jul 2012 12:17pm
How is it that you can make something feel so familiar and yet so foreign all at once? It is a beautiful piece. Am curious as to your inspiration for writing it, very well done!
21st Jul 2012 2:24pm
Thanks :) My inspiration was actually on a lake in Maine. It's one of the most inspiring places to me, ever.
25th Jul 2012 4:48am
This is a very introspective piece it speaks volumes about the paths one can take and end up at in life
Love it!
Love it!
25th Jul 2012 5:28am
12th Aug 2012 8:34pm
sublime
one poem is often enough of a rabbit-hole
into the mind of a poet.:] i love the
signature you have created and perfected.
looking forward to the entire collection now.
'I'll sing myself to sleep
a lullaby of sugar and smoke '
a tangible breathing image. loved it.:]
S3 is breathtaking. the high point. bravo.
the last line is glorious. sums it well.
well like i have said you have spent time
and now you are all blazing guns and roses.
elated to have come across you. always greedy
for depth and beauty in poetry.
write on, poetess
sumeet
one poem is often enough of a rabbit-hole
into the mind of a poet.:] i love the
signature you have created and perfected.
looking forward to the entire collection now.
'I'll sing myself to sleep
a lullaby of sugar and smoke '
a tangible breathing image. loved it.:]
S3 is breathtaking. the high point. bravo.
the last line is glorious. sums it well.
well like i have said you have spent time
and now you are all blazing guns and roses.
elated to have come across you. always greedy
for depth and beauty in poetry.
write on, poetess
sumeet
13th Aug 2012 3:46am
Thank you so much, Sumeet!
I'm glad to have stumbled across your work as well. It's a good experience for me as a writer and as a reader.
There's not much more I can say without making a fool of myself, so thanks again. Your commentary is special. Very intricate.
Write on yourself, you're extremely talented :)
I'm glad to have stumbled across your work as well. It's a good experience for me as a writer and as a reader.
There's not much more I can say without making a fool of myself, so thanks again. Your commentary is special. Very intricate.
Write on yourself, you're extremely talented :)
