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Cunning linguist
To fight for breath
between lusty lashings of tongue
escaping from thunder clamped thighs
is a blood rushing excitement,
and to sprain every muscle in mouth
while trigger happy hunting
every micro inch
of sublimely folded flesh
is a fitting tribute
to a warrior monk
spent
from prayer and war
Published 8th Jul 2012
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Anonymous
8th Jul 2012 8:08am
Awesome! And your title. . .very cunning;) Great poem, Lightbaron!
8th Jul 2012 11:14am
Splendid..thank ya kindly devlin..the title was only reason I put in erotic
8th Jul 2012 9:02am
Well, baron of light.
This is a nice meaty visual especially the spent warrior monk comparison. All the lines ended well and 'spent' worked very well standing on its own for that emphasis it needed. Good words.
This is a nice meaty visual especially the spent warrior monk comparison. All the lines ended well and 'spent' worked very well standing on its own for that emphasis it needed. Good words.
8th Jul 2012 11:15am
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8th Jul 2012 5:54pm
8th Jul 2012 6:19pm
And my dear I couldn't thank you enough for setting this up, .."THATS WHAT SHE SAID"
8th Jul 2012 6:31pm
8th Jul 2012 7:34pm
Again, you are just licking ass and taking... wait... no. Sorry. Your first line has 'breathes' I think you meant 'breaths' or 'breath'. Breathe is the action. I used to get them mixed as well.
Great read. Again, good sir.
Great read. Again, good sir.
8th Jul 2012 8:20pm
Flattery works every time ... Again my friend thanks on catching that error
10th Jul 2012 00:55am
10th Jul 2012 2:32am
11th Jul 2012 4:51am
That's how you fuck a poem.
The almost pissed off buildup, the evocative feel, the frantic pace, the release.
This fucking rocked.
YAY!
The almost pissed off buildup, the evocative feel, the frantic pace, the release.
This fucking rocked.
YAY!
11th Jul 2012 6:01am
Anonymous
10th Aug 2012 8:59am
Heartily agree with everything said above. Last six lines are I n c r e d I b l e.
Stashed on my reading list :D
Stashed on my reading list :D
10th Aug 2012 4:01pm
Anonymous
10th Aug 2012 9:43pm
Very much enjoyed this piece :) not much else to say after all the above comments lol
thanks for the read
thanks for the read
10th Aug 2012 10:43pm
Thank you so much ms.way.... wasnt super serious about this piece,but glad my tribute to my true passion n talent seems to go over fairly well
