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t a n t r a iv
I you
drift lie
ever spread
so slow eagled
my feet glorious
curling my
in the god
fluid dess
infancy waiting
of vast for verses
space of pagan
of a poetry
dream its a and
within wormhole shimmer
a dream a womb ing
in your a world adul
embrace we ation
created
I in
wrest its
you childish
with cland
my estine
ancient irides
hunger it cence
drink sings your
your back phero
scent to me mones
begin my
to seeth
melt ing
over buds
until a singular
voice rises
from
within
us
concomitant
we
roll
topple
collide
coalesce
change
states
shapes
once liquid porous primordial
once astral suspended
we fuse and diffuse
[non-being]
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three earlier parts can be read here:
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/56672-t-a-n-t-r-a/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/56991-t-a-n-t-r-a-ii/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/57071-t-a-n-t-r-a-iii/
drift lie
ever spread
so slow eagled
my feet glorious
curling my
in the god
fluid dess
infancy waiting
of vast for verses
space of pagan
of a poetry
dream its a and
within wormhole shimmer
a dream a womb ing
in your a world adul
embrace we ation
created
I in
wrest its
you childish
with cland
my estine
ancient irides
hunger it cence
drink sings your
your back phero
scent to me mones
begin my
to seeth
melt ing
over buds
until a singular
voice rises
from
within
us
concomitant
we
roll
topple
collide
coalesce
change
states
shapes
once liquid porous primordial
once astral suspended
we fuse and diffuse
[non-being]
_________________________________________________________________
three earlier parts can be read here:
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/56672-t-a-n-t-r-a/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/56991-t-a-n-t-r-a-ii/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/57071-t-a-n-t-r-a-iii/
Published 25th Jun 2012
| Edited 26th Jun 2012
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Anonymous
25th Jun 2012 11:01pm
The shape is sinuous this time. A bloom atop a flame.
As usual, the worshipful tone, the reverence bestowed upon your subject, is tangible.
As usual, the worshipful tone, the reverence bestowed upon your subject, is tangible.
26th Jun 2012 1:14am
aish
fire beckons fire.flame calls out for flame:)
thank you for everything. recognizing, most
importantly.
'you are, therefore it is':)
thank you, old soul
s'
fire beckons fire.flame calls out for flame:)
thank you for everything. recognizing, most
importantly.
'you are, therefore it is':)
thank you, old soul
s'
25th Jun 2012 11:53pm
oh my! The words itself make it a great poem but how you constructed it makes it memorable
26th Jun 2012 1:11am
matthew
thank you sir. well i actually
had to toil for close to one hour
to get it to what it looks now.
i genuinely wish submitting was
easier with more options.
nevertheless it turned out well,
different than what i had intended.
may be this is how 'twas supposed
to be.:)
respect,
sumeet
thank you sir. well i actually
had to toil for close to one hour
to get it to what it looks now.
i genuinely wish submitting was
easier with more options.
nevertheless it turned out well,
different than what i had intended.
may be this is how 'twas supposed
to be.:)
respect,
sumeet
26th Jun 2012 1:17am
I agree with Matthew. The words are sensually eloquent. Then to add the contour, makes this piece magnificent.
26th Jun 2012 1:34am
Rachel,
Thank you for the visitation and
leaving your imprints. You are kind.
As ever.:)
Light,
Sumeet
Thank you for the visitation and
leaving your imprints. You are kind.
As ever.:)
Light,
Sumeet
26th Jun 2012 2:10am
26th Jun 2012 2:43am
lightbaron
ah, such a pleasure to have you here.:)
and coming from you it means a lot.
thankyou.
ah, such a pleasure to have you here.:)
and coming from you it means a lot.
thankyou.
26th Jun 2012 7:23am
26th Jun 2012 1:38pm
26th Jun 2012 9:25pm
between us, how many hours did it take you to shape this poem?
Anyway, there are some interesting alliterations which give the poem a certain musicality apart from its spiritually eroticised theme(?)
Anyway, there are some interesting alliterations which give the poem a certain musicality apart from its spiritually eroticised theme(?)
26th Jun 2012 10:06pm
Ophie
Ha ha.:) You.
I had actually explained it before. The actual form
was very different than this. I created that in less than 15 minutes[notepad and imagination]
However it was near-impossible to achieve on DU. I edited, saved it in a draft and finally published it with 'work in progress' attached to the title.
Finally I succeeded. It looked very different from the original. [Better as many would say]
Overall, it was roughly around 90 minutes. [You can calculate from the time of submission and modification] :) sush.
Glad that the alliterations worked well for you.
'Spiritually eroticised theme' made me smile.
Thank you for stopping by and leaving your imprints.
Light,
Sumeet
Ha ha.:) You.
I had actually explained it before. The actual form
was very different than this. I created that in less than 15 minutes[notepad and imagination]
However it was near-impossible to achieve on DU. I edited, saved it in a draft and finally published it with 'work in progress' attached to the title.
Finally I succeeded. It looked very different from the original. [Better as many would say]
Overall, it was roughly around 90 minutes. [You can calculate from the time of submission and modification] :) sush.
Glad that the alliterations worked well for you.
'Spiritually eroticised theme' made me smile.
Thank you for stopping by and leaving your imprints.
Light,
Sumeet
