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Delicate Secret
The sun wilted the flower
That I grew inside
My secret garden.
I never should have believed
In the sincerity
Of a passing sun,
But he promised he'd be careful.
The flower first grew brighter.
Pink blushing petals spread,
Blooming to his soft touch.
Sunfire licking
At the very heart of her.
She turned her swooning head
To follow him across the sky.
Alas,
The sunset always comes too soon.
He whispered colorful goodbyes
As he slipped past the horizon
To shine on other gardens.
Petals fell and pink blush faded
As her heavy head drooped downward.
My secret garden
Shall never be the same
After feeling the touch of the sun.
That I grew inside
My secret garden.
I never should have believed
In the sincerity
Of a passing sun,
But he promised he'd be careful.
The flower first grew brighter.
Pink blushing petals spread,
Blooming to his soft touch.
Sunfire licking
At the very heart of her.
She turned her swooning head
To follow him across the sky.
Alas,
The sunset always comes too soon.
He whispered colorful goodbyes
As he slipped past the horizon
To shine on other gardens.
Petals fell and pink blush faded
As her heavy head drooped downward.
My secret garden
Shall never be the same
After feeling the touch of the sun.
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Re: Delicate Secret
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19th Jun 2012 9:02pm
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20th Jun 2012 3:28am
I will tap this inspiration until the well runs dry! Speechless is quite a compliment all itself, love. Thank you so much! Your comments can never do harm, and I always want to hear what you think.
Re: Delicate Secret
19th Jun 2012 9:15pm
Beautiful. My grandmother named every flower... talked with them each day. I think they lived longer because of her nurturing.
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re: Re: Delicate Secret
20th Jun 2012 3:29am
Thank you! Nurture is indeed necessary in more than gardening. Glad you enjoyed.
Re: Delicate Secret
19th Jun 2012 9:54pm
This is just beautiful, all bias aside. Wonderful metaphor and the colors really did a great job of expressing the mood. Fantastically done.
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20th Jun 2012 3:30am
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20th Jun 2012 5:50pm
You are not only a wonderful poet but a mystic, filled with awe regarding the "sun." As I'm sure you know, for many peoples the sun was a god, like RA in Egypt at one time. I not only admire your poem. I can feel it.
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re: Re: Delicate Secret
20th Jun 2012 9:30pm
My goal is to evoke feeling. I love you seeing the godlike quality to the sun. :) Thank you so very much for your kind words!
Re: Delicate Secret
22nd Jun 2012 3:37am
I very much like this poems imagery, I can see a face upon the flower as she drops her head the visuals aspect of this poem is excellent.
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28th Jun 2012 8:44am
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23rd Jun 2012 4:50pm
This poem has depth....like emmily dickinson style....ive read it seven times and am still finding new meaning the loss of innocence...three strength that comes after pain...so much more...i love this
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28th Jun 2012 8:45am
Thanks you, darling! Happy to know you liked it enough to read it that many times.
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4th Jul 2012 7:15am