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Describing God
I admired the way you
Described god so clearly,
While dusting the cold
glass window.
The evening is like that,
Grave and alive, as you
Said. Tall and short,
Nothing to marvel at,
really.
Like a child reading a
Book out loud. Some
Words he gets and
Some are skipped over
entirely
Described god so clearly,
While dusting the cold
glass window.
The evening is like that,
Grave and alive, as you
Said. Tall and short,
Nothing to marvel at,
really.
Like a child reading a
Book out loud. Some
Words he gets and
Some are skipped over
entirely
Published 13th Jun 2012
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13th Jun 2012 8:52pm
Anonymous
13th Jun 2012 8:52pm
The structure of this poem is very interesting, and I liked the image of the child reading a book out loud. I like poems which play with form and are abstract. This one shows a taste for experimentation which I hope is consistent in your work. Thanks for the read.
13th Jun 2012 9:37pm
Thank you again, Jack! This poem was in part a reflection on a David Hume quote
14th Jun 2012 4:38am
not bad
its more of a story
looking at it that way
i like how you made a picture in 12 or so lines
it'd be cooooool if you made the endings rhyme
rhymes make it better but can be a pain
something about it was so worth my time to read
its more of a story
looking at it that way
i like how you made a picture in 12 or so lines
it'd be cooooool if you made the endings rhyme
rhymes make it better but can be a pain
something about it was so worth my time to read
14th Jun 2012 3:59pm
Hmm I will think about that, sometimes a rhyme at the end can be really powerful and stick with the reader longer /it is always good to try a poem out in different structures and techniques until you find the one that fits yourself and the poem/
Thank you for the read and comment!
Thank you for the read and comment!
