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Jeezus, Betty this hits hard. The closing line is a knock out, absolutely killer poetry. Of course such killer lines can't exist in a vacuum and what precedes it is as tight and as edgy as I've come to expect from you. Awesome wouldn't cut it even if weren't a cliché. Neither does ... Bravo!! But please accept both.   Red

P.S. You have a typo in your title (cLick)

Thanks for the catch, Red.

Some days you have to hit it so hard you get a damn hernia, or you're just not living. I guess today happened to be one of them days, eh?

Betty

Dear frigging god!

Only you, I say. Hard poetry.
This does not let one breathe.
A vortex, a maelstorm this is.

A ton of bricks smashed with a smile.
And by the end one has the smile.
With the death squad in the circus joker outfits.

I could not pick up my favourites.
But after two reads..



'It’s like trying to jack-off a Ken doll,
life that is, since you
cast me off like a
used condom;
limp,  
filled with you,
and useless for
any other purpose.'

What a start? What an image? This shakes the soul within with its robust rawness. Bravo!


'and it filled me with unease on some
obscure level I couldn’t understand.
So I’d chop off their hair,
strip those bitches naked,
and draw on their faces with Sharpies.'

This almost made me cry. Probably the best thing
I have read in sometime. Stuff like these are ticking timebombs that make people snap. In a good way. It will stay with me forever.

And what an end. Though it has the word 'move'
it sits there like a monolith. This was the last ebb in the supertide.


Betty. Thank you for sharing this.

Write on, poetess

Curtsy.

Sumeet

Dude, Sumeet, you are so freaking sweet and complimentary that I'm going to become a complete egotist.

Thank you. I appreciate your analysis, and your praise. I love that you caught my ending intent.

Betty

"I'm now the cliche I've mocked my entire life"..I couldn't believe those words and how you just summed up my whole existence with them

Dude, sorry about that. It's a shitty feeling, isn't it?

You wander around absolutely aware of your personhood, and then... you discover you're just another cheap cutout, and it's like... why didn't you fuckers drown me at birth because the irony is just too fucking ironic.

Anyhoo, I'm babbling. Thanks for the read.

Betty

Damned fine work Betty. It has your signature clean well-written style with it's overt sexiness, but also you seem to have packed more than the usual amount of emotion. Now I don't know if to believe that this is more personal than what you have offered to us in the past, but that is the impression that I get.  
 
I am particularly fond of  
"filled with you,  
and useless for  
any other purpose"  
 
Now your bawdy humor still keeps the emotion from getting too far in command, but I have to say I still feel it very strongly. Two thumbs up.
  
Oh yeah... nice title.

Thanks Bragg,

There might be, it might be. Just a little.

I'm glad you enjoyed it, as always I really freaking appreciate your reviews, even if I give you hard time.

As for the title, I put some serious effort into it, so thank you!

The whole thing is priceless, I mean for fuck sake
not many people can use the imagery of a used condom and pull it off without it all getting into a big mess.

Now that's POetry !

I agree with Steve that if you take a look under the humor there is a much more compelling story being told making the whole poem a much more complex and layered write.

A great write/read.    shine on!

Thanks, man. Glad you enjoyed it!

Wow. Speechless.
I was a little lost in the poem to begin with, but that's probably just due to my absentmindedness. But once I reached the last stanza, I think I might have actually gasped out loud. It's perfect. I dunno why it struck me like it did, but it's wonderful. I've re-read it about five times now, with chills each time. Just, wow x

Thank you.