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the sex and violence of a metaphor
"These violent delights have violent ends, and in their triumph die,
Like fire and powder, which as they kiss, consume." - William Shakespeare
her melancholia always had a way
of wrapping itself around my throat
like the tightening of a noose
with heavy feet on a wobbly chair
it was the way she looked at me
that had me hanging myself
at the mercy of her desires
my resolve unraveling
at the unspoken promises in her eyes
that only through pain could we set
ourselves free from the demons we craved
my body a story of bruises and blood
to be read in the ecstasy of bitten-off screams
of my gagged, assimilated soul
willing, always willing
to fall on perpetually bruised knees
and gaze up at her magnitude
that burnt through me with every lament
uttered from her spirit-drenched lips
as I dragged her whimpering into bliss
pleading for oblivion at my touch
in the love-soaked sheets of our delusion
amid the echoes of our screams
it was easy to imagine heaven within the abyss
God a silent watcher to our guilt-christened fucks
that only fueled the passion for more violent affairs
agony our paltry saviour while we dined on pleasure
gluttons for punishment at the click of rosary beads
‘til death do us part
© Indie Adams 2012
Like fire and powder, which as they kiss, consume." - William Shakespeare
her melancholia always had a way
of wrapping itself around my throat
like the tightening of a noose
with heavy feet on a wobbly chair
it was the way she looked at me
that had me hanging myself
at the mercy of her desires
my resolve unraveling
at the unspoken promises in her eyes
that only through pain could we set
ourselves free from the demons we craved
my body a story of bruises and blood
to be read in the ecstasy of bitten-off screams
of my gagged, assimilated soul
willing, always willing
to fall on perpetually bruised knees
and gaze up at her magnitude
that burnt through me with every lament
uttered from her spirit-drenched lips
as I dragged her whimpering into bliss
pleading for oblivion at my touch
in the love-soaked sheets of our delusion
amid the echoes of our screams
it was easy to imagine heaven within the abyss
God a silent watcher to our guilt-christened fucks
that only fueled the passion for more violent affairs
agony our paltry saviour while we dined on pleasure
gluttons for punishment at the click of rosary beads
‘til death do us part
© Indie Adams 2012
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Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
Anonymous
27th May 2012 2:29pm
I like how you put some Shakespeare into this poem at the beginning...
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re: Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
28th May 2012 7:24am
Thanks for your comment Savvy9, I've been looking for an opportunity to use that quote and I think it works with this poem perfectly x)
Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
Anonymous
27th May 2012 6:40pm
I wish I knew her.
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re: Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
28th May 2012 7:25am
Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
YAY! That was exciting to read. And I don't mean like, "I have girl wood" exciting, I mean like, that was rife with awesome imagery, and fascinating turns of phrasing exciting.
The opening line is haunting and lovely
"her melancholia always had a way
of wrapping itself around my throat"
Dang!
The mutual shame-hate sequences, in which you are the corrupt one, but yet you are totally at her mercy.
And in the delicacy of poetry, guilt is always the perfect seasoning, and this was ridiculously flavored.
Good stuff!
Betty
The opening line is haunting and lovely
"her melancholia always had a way
of wrapping itself around my throat"
Dang!
The mutual shame-hate sequences, in which you are the corrupt one, but yet you are totally at her mercy.
And in the delicacy of poetry, guilt is always the perfect seasoning, and this was ridiculously flavored.
Good stuff!
Betty
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re: Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
28th May 2012 7:26am
Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
29th May 2012 00:06am
My question is, who's the significant other? The title, The Sex and Violence of a Metaphor, is what struck me. But as I was reading the poem, (and I read it twice), I'm getting really antsy to know if you're telling the story in essence of the title or are you telling a morbid love story involving metaphors.
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re: Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
I'll happily allay your anxiety Nicky, the entire poem is an erotic metaphor for death, though it's a little more complicated than just that. The significant other is a fantasy woman. She doesn't exist and never has outside of my head. I drew on personal experiences to write this, but it is majoritively fiction. If you want to know more about the creation of this poem I wrote this on the writing of it http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/53797-the-writing-of-a-fantasy/
Peace, Indie
Peace, Indie
Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
29th May 2012 8:20pm
I love the pain and violence of this illusive mystery woman..this is a masterpiece Indie..peace Crim
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re: Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
29th May 2012 10:47pm
I finally made it. . .
Anonymous
29th May 2012 11:06pm
Hi Miss Indie, I finally made it to your neck of the woods. I enjoy poems that incorporate Shakespeare, erotica, and death thus allowing the Poet (now you) to create something so thought provoking and vivid, and if not careful, could echo in eternity. This is a splendid masterpiece, a perfect example of metaphorism at its best, and rawest!
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re: I finally made it. . .
30th May 2012 00:04am
:)
31st May 2012 6:52pm
Miss Indie
I loved how you have blended it.
Like Betty has pointed, the beginning
of the first stanza is some beginning.
It begins at the crescendo and takes
it from there.
The perpetually bruised knee reminded
me of Emily Rose. I loved the choice
of words in this poem.
A memorable write.
Write on,
Sumeet
I loved how you have blended it.
Like Betty has pointed, the beginning
of the first stanza is some beginning.
It begins at the crescendo and takes
it from there.
The perpetually bruised knee reminded
me of Emily Rose. I loved the choice
of words in this poem.
A memorable write.
Write on,
Sumeet
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re: :)
6th Jun 2012 11:12am
Sumeet, thank you for your kind words. This was an interesting poem to write. I wanted to avoid anything cliched as much as I humanly could, while keeping the dark tone sensual.
I like your reference to Emily Rose. I'm flattered.
Peace, Indie.
I like your reference to Emily Rose. I'm flattered.
Peace, Indie.
Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
4th Jun 2012 8:43pm
Indie, this is such a fucking beautiful poem, I love it so much. Keep on writing :)
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re: Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
6th Jun 2012 11:13am
Thank you for your lovely feedback Sublime. Much appreciated. Glad you enjoyed. :D
Peace, Indie.
Peace, Indie.
LA
6th Jun 2012 11:47am
You create a stunning image here, Indie. The first metaphor had me twisted into your poem. Heaven. Well done. X
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Re: the sex and violence of a metaphor
12th Jun 2012 3:59am
This is such an amazing poem!!! I love it!! It just draws me in, I have got to read more of your work!!
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12th Jun 2012 6:01am