Hold My Beer

couldn’t put it better   ..

Cheers, Paul! xo

I really enjoyed this beautiful Ahavati that's the fire I love about you 💕

Thank you, Brenda! Hadn't seen you around lately! Hope all is well with you. xo

Righteous rage & that firing violence is a need too when the need needs it .. & only a raging righteous truthful artist can dig deep the depths revealing realising the light the salvation in a revolution.. I see this here dear A ..fiery minimalism! xo

There's the righteous rage we discussed in a previous post! Needed when needed!

Thank you for such a kind comment, my sweet friend! I appreciate you more than you'll ever know. xo

Truth spoken indeed I will take a glass of beer 🍻 cold without the ICE CUBE 🧊🧊🧊

LOL! No ice cube it is, Stoney! Cheers, my friend!

Respect Dear friend and POETESS QUEEN 👑👊

*curtsies*

Thank you, my friend! xo

You are welcome DEAR FRIEND AND POETESS ✍️👍💪💯

rather charming little poem, which bounces along and embodies its own sentiments: concise and clear.    In the spirit of honest critique:  
   
a) 'Pssst' is perhaps too informal for this poem,    
   
b) the repetition of the title as the end line feels not quite right.  
   
c) to save words without sacrificing meaning or elegance, you could switch 'clear' and 'concise', so that  
   
in a manner that was clear    
and concise    
   
becomes    
   
in a manner concise  
and clear  
   
thereby increasing the poem's conciseness whilst retaining its clarity:)  
 
d) the idea of The Poem writing itself via the poet to write is cool

Hey, Seacat!

Thanks so much for the honest critique, I appreciate it greatly. Don't think I don't heed your suggestions because I do. I don't change the post because if I did readers wouldn't know what you were referring to. I always like to leave the original up for additional review.

Anyway, I appreciate the time and attention you donate to my efforts, in addition to your kind and observing comments.

You’re right about leaving the original so that the comments continue to make sense.  Reading my comments again, no longer so sure that ‘concise’ and ‘clear’ need to be swapped; so heigh ho .

It's funny how the more you read something the more it changes. . .

Brilliantly penned, Tams. Into the list it belongs. Appreciate you.

Damian  

Thank you for the honor, Damian! Much appreciated.

Outstanding.

Thank you, Wally! Much appreciated.

Your gift of shape shifting is always noticed and brings forth new creations each time, what ever slippers you wear they all seem to suit you, an insightful short but concise write, greetings love and blessings
Rianne

Thank you so much for that notation, Anne-Ri! I don't know that as a poet I even have a voice. Unlike you or Uma's profound and spiritually connective pieces—that, btw, would be recognized straight way. Maybe I'm just trying on sizes to see which are more comfortable - or maybe I'll never choose a permanent pair.

I certainly do love this comment, though! Thank you! xo

Love this one, never thought I would see "beer" on your page, but I love it. Cheers.

LOL! I have a freak flag, Duende! Trust me! If we ever meet you'll see it! LOL!

Thank you, my friend. xo

I wanted something to read and related.
I never thought it was this piece.

great ink

LOL! I guess a good "beer" does it every time, hey?! Happy you related, pOt! Thank you!

Dear A,

I’m not exactly sure where I’m going with this but psssst-ing and beer and monster emotional undercurrents just felt like a whole lot of Sturm und Drang. And then the clock of understanding and mental call of “hold my beer” …amazing what will put things in place. I really enjoyed this piece. H🌷

Haha! Again, the "beer" was top quality and pulled people in. You can take a sip any tme you like if you're holding it! xo

Bravo!! Love the ending. Hugs and love, Oral

Thanks, Oral! Much appreciated!

Aah...the last verse...killer !❤️

Thank you, Sweet InDreamz! xo

Ha! That's relatable. Sometimes you just need a poem to tell you to chill and let it out. Short, funny, and to the point.

Hahahaha! So true! Nothing like a good, ice-cold beer! Especially on a hot summer night!