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Smoke In A Flower Field
write me a poem
that i know you care
for, to give away your word
i think you'll never dare
make me hear your whisper
sense a woman's flair
who recedes like the ebb
from a thirsty sand.
play me a tune
between your closed lips
a perfume aria
floating from tulips
the world is void of romance
haunted with metal needs
abstract on their thoughts
whistling thru' empty reeds
Come pluck a chord.
from my fragile heart
it's what i can afford
i' m poorly armed,
from the first ever start
i try to romanticize a feeling
while it's a wild wild world
only wars and blood spurting
how to play a musical chord
But, wait ! this is not our world
it is the dead one
let them live deadly
we are still true poets
Published 18th Nov 2024
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19th Nov 2024 2:20pm
We are truly suffering from a dead world.. an empty word.. a lifeless soul.. a love devoid of its essence.. a Humanity stripped of dignity.. We are living a world of followers who blindly praise and applaude.. no sense of awareness.. no critical thinking.. no creativity.. A humanity of no genuine human bonds and values.. How I long for so fascinating pictures and paintings.. How heartwarming to read a poem of Love that transcends the degrading diction and the embarrassing dull imagery.. how I long for a poetry that digs deep into the beauty and wonder of living things and human beings.. We need to remain alive vibrating with life not dead souls dying slowly without even being aware of..
A wonderful poetry of true feelings and fascinating picture! So much enjoyed reading you. Stay always blessed and happy.
A wonderful poetry of true feelings and fascinating picture! So much enjoyed reading you. Stay always blessed and happy.
A critical mind is what we need, not a poetic heart, as poetry is everyWhere Critics assess the poetic level, its genuinity, its literary beauty, figures of speech:imagery, metaphors and all the ingredient to flavor a literary work, make it a poetic dish to savour...
Things we lack in today's authors and poets,
Thru my reading literary critics, i got the idea that the critical mind is missing from the aesthetic space, and that the word beauty is in decadence...reason that i am to say whet the reader needs and where beauty resides.....Arts and Literature coexist and interact to give a good result....therefore what you said here is a real critic, you made brightly with the mindful pen, quite aware of every word you say.....
its a honour to see and read such feedback, Thank you My Smile,.Hamid
Things we lack in today's authors and poets,
Thru my reading literary critics, i got the idea that the critical mind is missing from the aesthetic space, and that the word beauty is in decadence...reason that i am to say whet the reader needs and where beauty resides.....Arts and Literature coexist and interact to give a good result....therefore what you said here is a real critic, you made brightly with the mindful pen, quite aware of every word you say.....
its a honour to see and read such feedback, Thank you My Smile,.Hamid
