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Erotic Senses -Taste
Filling up the truck
The taste of diesel in the air
Memory burning
remembering
a roadside bar
Forceful kisses
Tasting of beer and whiskey
Up against the car
Pushed up skirt
Panties around the knees
Pure lustful need
The air in parking lot
Tasting of diesel and dust.
August night
hot and dry
Relief in a breath of wind
through the open window
Feather kisses
Tasting salty skin
Down your body
Legs parting invitation
Saltier,
briny, oysters
mineral, champagne
yeasty, bread
A feast for savouring
Click of lock
creaking hinges.
Hi I’m home
Hi, you’re later than usual
Ya, down the hall at Marie’s place
We had some wine
Come here, I have a present for you
Kiss me,
like you mean it.
A hint of white wine
and
something
What did you have to eat?
Marie
Can you taste her on me?
Come with me down the hall
So we can both drink wine
and
Marie
The taste of diesel in the air
Memory burning
remembering
a roadside bar
Forceful kisses
Tasting of beer and whiskey
Up against the car
Pushed up skirt
Panties around the knees
Pure lustful need
The air in parking lot
Tasting of diesel and dust.
August night
hot and dry
Relief in a breath of wind
through the open window
Feather kisses
Tasting salty skin
Down your body
Legs parting invitation
Saltier,
briny, oysters
mineral, champagne
yeasty, bread
A feast for savouring
Click of lock
creaking hinges.
Hi I’m home
Hi, you’re later than usual
Ya, down the hall at Marie’s place
We had some wine
Come here, I have a present for you
Kiss me,
like you mean it.
A hint of white wine
and
something
What did you have to eat?
Marie
Can you taste her on me?
Come with me down the hall
So we can both drink wine
and
Marie
Published 26th Oct 2024
Author's Note
Exploring the sense of taste. This ended up being three separate little vignettes. Taste is a really hard sense to describe since we don’t have many specific words for taste - we say things taste like something. If you haven’t tasted the thing it is challenging to imagine what it tastes like. In the three vignettes, I have tried to explore taste in different ways: a trigger for memory; describing the taste of oral sex by combining familiar foods; and use taste as an erotic surprise. Please let me know what you think. There might be a second set of scenes if you like these ones. I have a couple more ideas to work up.
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26th Oct 2024 8:31pm
I Love this!
Comparing the taste of a woman with food is perfect. I really like how you used the present situation and not the typical. And that last vignette- so naughty.
More please.
Comparing the taste of a woman with food is perfect. I really like how you used the present situation and not the typical. And that last vignette- so naughty.
More please.
Dear H,
Thank you for reading and commenting 🌹. It is challenging to describe that particular taste and it changes.
Thank you for reading and commenting 🌹. It is challenging to describe that particular taste and it changes.
Agree with Her. Particularly liked these lines:
Tasting salty skin
Down your body
Legs parting invitation
Saltier,
briny, oysters
mineral, champagne
yeasty, bread
A feast for savouring
Tasting salty skin
Down your body
Legs parting invitation
Saltier,
briny, oysters
mineral, champagne
yeasty, bread
A feast for savouring
27th Oct 2024 6:35pm
30th Oct 2024 1:57am
Well this is quite a mouthful! Lol.
I get a sense of the rush, in the during (second) stanza. Because it's full throttle at that point. The third stanza really knocked me sideways in my chair! I wasn't expecting that direction of an ending at all.
Obviously this write fits wonderfully with your other senses ones. Yet it has more urgency to me. Like you found your high gear.
Great stuff Trillium.
I get a sense of the rush, in the during (second) stanza. Because it's full throttle at that point. The third stanza really knocked me sideways in my chair! I wasn't expecting that direction of an ending at all.
Obviously this write fits wonderfully with your other senses ones. Yet it has more urgency to me. Like you found your high gear.
Great stuff Trillium.
30th Oct 2024 2:30am
Thank you for reading and commenting. I like that you found the last stanza a surprise- that was the idea.
