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When You Lay Me Down
Sound ceases
Heart beats carry on silently
Savagely
Please
Tear me apart gently
Pour your soul into me
Sync your darkness with what’s left of my fragility
Until there’s nothing left of me
Sheets and the ribbons of my dreams twisting
Let love be the sin I repent on my knees
Needing the danger we feed
Flames higher than I can see
Searing the ceiling
Until fireflies
Burn in my eyes
Stripped of all my schemes and lies
You make me wanna give up the fight
It can’t be a crime
The way I want to make your soul mine
Heart beats carry on silently
Savagely
Please
Tear me apart gently
Pour your soul into me
Sync your darkness with what’s left of my fragility
Until there’s nothing left of me
Sheets and the ribbons of my dreams twisting
Let love be the sin I repent on my knees
Needing the danger we feed
Flames higher than I can see
Searing the ceiling
Until fireflies
Burn in my eyes
Stripped of all my schemes and lies
You make me wanna give up the fight
It can’t be a crime
The way I want to make your soul mine
Published 20th Oct 2024
Author's Note
Copyright @ Her 2024. All rights reserved.
This wrote itself in about three minutes. I like the way it turned out. I know, I’ve used this photo before, it’s a fave- different filter.
This wrote itself in about three minutes. I like the way it turned out. I know, I’ve used this photo before, it’s a fave- different filter.
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20th Oct 2024 3:05am
I'm going to assume you were operating on a dose of internal passion when you wrote this. It shows. Sometimes poems that come out quick are the most fruitful ones to make.
I like the picture. They're in the heat of lovemaking and your words reflect the picture well.
I like the picture. They're in the heat of lovemaking and your words reflect the picture well.
20th Oct 2024 3:11am
20th Oct 2024 3:48am
Oh my...
Hot damn, I seem to be at a loss for words. This is glorious.
❤️k
Hot damn, I seem to be at a loss for words. This is glorious.
❤️k
20th Oct 2024 3:54am
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20th Oct 2024 7:34am
A very fruitful 3 minutes this has given us readers. Favourite lines for the passion they convey:
Heart beats carry on silently
Savagely
Please
Tear me apart gently
Pour your soul into me
Sync your darkness with what’s left of my fragility
Until there’s nothing left of me
Heart beats carry on silently
Savagely
Please
Tear me apart gently
Pour your soul into me
Sync your darkness with what’s left of my fragility
Until there’s nothing left of me
20th Oct 2024 5:42pm
20th Oct 2024 7:41am
You write so honestly that my imagination can't help but run wild.
I'm glad that words can, from time to time, let you breathe deeply and make you whole again.
I'm glad that words can, from time to time, let you breathe deeply and make you whole again.
20th Oct 2024 5:43pm
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20th Oct 2024 9:52am
Illuminating way of giving body and breath to your creativity it echoes in each word you give you turn imagination into a gift of reality
20th Oct 2024 5:45pm
20th Oct 2024 3:28pm
Well, Damn, Lady!!
What you want from your lover is no crime.
But the way your inked imagery got my mind going haywire...? That might get you 15-20.
Hell of a fine write
What you want from your lover is no crime.
But the way your inked imagery got my mind going haywire...? That might get you 15-20.
Hell of a fine write
20th Oct 2024 5:46pm
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