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i can't change things
what
did i
take
from her,
too much,
too little,
at this
moment
it may
be
impossible
to tell,
i cannot
go back
and change
things,
the only
thing i
can do
is try
to move
forward,
and try
to
understand
her side.
did i
take
from her,
too much,
too little,
at this
moment
it may
be
impossible
to tell,
i cannot
go back
and change
things,
the only
thing i
can do
is try
to move
forward,
and try
to
understand
her side.
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Re. i can't change things
20th Oct 2024 00:08am
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Anonymous
20th Oct 2024 2:09am
It's a miracle when relationships actually work.
I appreciate your wanting to understand from her side.
I appreciate your wanting to understand from her side.
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20th Oct 2024 2:18am
Re. i can't change things
20th Oct 2024 3:04am
Dear J,
Awesome perspective piece. Trying to get inside someone else’s head is the ultimate attempt at altruism. This piece made me think of the generosity of some folks I’ve met who’ve done this for me instead of just calling me an unreasonable. Great write. H🌷
Awesome perspective piece. Trying to get inside someone else’s head is the ultimate attempt at altruism. This piece made me think of the generosity of some folks I’ve met who’ve done this for me instead of just calling me an unreasonable. Great write. H🌷
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20th Oct 2024 3:06am
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Re. i can't change things
20th Oct 2024 3:46am
It’s difficult to get to the other side but when you do it’s a lot easier.
Love this, wolf.
Love this, wolf.
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20th Oct 2024 3:47am
Re. i can't change things
20th Oct 2024 10:35am
Dear Jimmy,
Your piece "i can't change things" resonates with a raw honesty that's both touching and thought-provoking. The simplicity of your words belies the depth of emotion and self-reflection they convey. It's a beautiful example of how poetry can distill complex feelings into a few powerful lines.
Your willingness to try to understand her side shows a level of empathy that's truly admirable. It reminds me a bit of Neruda's love poems - not in style, but in the way it grapples with the complexities of human relationships.
The line "at this moment it may be impossible to tell" particularly struck me. It captures that sense of uncertainty we often feel in the aftermath of significant events in our lives. Your awareness that you can't change the past, but can only move forward, shows a wisdom that comes from deep introspection.
As someone who's been writing poetry for over half a century, I appreciate how you've managed to provoke thought with such concise language. It's a skill that poets like Dickinson mastered, and it's wonderful to see it employed so effectively here.
Keep writing and sharing your thoughts, Jimmy. Your ability to distill complex emotions into accessible poetry is a gift, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
P.S. Your "About Me" gave me a good chuckle. Sometimes a bit of humor is just what we need when dealing with life's challenges!
Your piece "i can't change things" resonates with a raw honesty that's both touching and thought-provoking. The simplicity of your words belies the depth of emotion and self-reflection they convey. It's a beautiful example of how poetry can distill complex feelings into a few powerful lines.
Your willingness to try to understand her side shows a level of empathy that's truly admirable. It reminds me a bit of Neruda's love poems - not in style, but in the way it grapples with the complexities of human relationships.
The line "at this moment it may be impossible to tell" particularly struck me. It captures that sense of uncertainty we often feel in the aftermath of significant events in our lives. Your awareness that you can't change the past, but can only move forward, shows a wisdom that comes from deep introspection.
As someone who's been writing poetry for over half a century, I appreciate how you've managed to provoke thought with such concise language. It's a skill that poets like Dickinson mastered, and it's wonderful to see it employed so effectively here.
Keep writing and sharing your thoughts, Jimmy. Your ability to distill complex emotions into accessible poetry is a gift, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
P.S. Your "About Me" gave me a good chuckle. Sometimes a bit of humor is just what we need when dealing with life's challenges!
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20th Oct 2024 10:40am