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Inside
When your
Psychological spotlight
Apears
Out of nowhere
Catching you
On your road
Of dispair
With nowhere to run
Nowhere to hide
Would you acknowledge
Those cold hearted facts
Do you Dare
The facts to Prove
What your Hiding
Inside the place
That you Fear
Psychological spotlight
Apears
Out of nowhere
Catching you
On your road
Of dispair
With nowhere to run
Nowhere to hide
Would you acknowledge
Those cold hearted facts
Do you Dare
The facts to Prove
What your Hiding
Inside the place
That you Fear
Published 6th Oct 2024
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Excellent writing, I shivered. It feels very real and raw.
I did have one brief suggestion: could you use an expression more personal and evocative instead of: "Psychological spotlight"? To me, it yanks the reader from the mood of the poem.
I did have one brief suggestion: could you use an expression more personal and evocative instead of: "Psychological spotlight"? To me, it yanks the reader from the mood of the poem.
8th Oct 2024 12:06pm
