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Yield
As full and as bright as her bumper crops,
she rose, like suitors by an arbor rung,
and higher than notes by falsetto sung...
in right ascension... right past the treetops
to sail through her meridian space
over the stratojet and shooting star
or any aviation objet d'art
at a sonic or supersonic pace.
Only wind chimes and crickets orchestrate
to score her silent orbit far above
our fair medium of earshot love
where daybreak birdsong is the morning fate
of the Harvest moon and all of her beams...
plowing the whole night...
our field of dreams!
she rose, like suitors by an arbor rung,
and higher than notes by falsetto sung...
in right ascension... right past the treetops
to sail through her meridian space
over the stratojet and shooting star
or any aviation objet d'art
at a sonic or supersonic pace.
Only wind chimes and crickets orchestrate
to score her silent orbit far above
our fair medium of earshot love
where daybreak birdsong is the morning fate
of the Harvest moon and all of her beams...
plowing the whole night...
our field of dreams!
Published 17th Sep 2024
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17th Sep 2024 11:35am
Lovely imagery! Unfortunately, it's cloudy here from a tropical storm. Rain is expected throughout the day and we're still under a flood watch; however, hoping it clears up by tonight.
I wasn't certain about "right" twice in the same line until I read "sonic/supersonic" on down. Then it's like it blended in, like a cloud.
I wasn't certain about "right" twice in the same line until I read "sonic/supersonic" on down. Then it's like it blended in, like a cloud.
17th Sep 2024 11:59am
I try not to use any word more than once in a poem but I wanted to attract attention to right ascension as an astronomical term.
It always seems like the moon gains altitude faster than it sinks. 🌕
It always seems like the moon gains altitude faster than it sinks. 🌕
17th Sep 2024 3:24pm
17th Sep 2024 9:52pm
Hey thanks, D-bear.
That old Harvest moon has always been a good poetry prompt 🌕
That old Harvest moon has always been a good poetry prompt 🌕
20th Sep 2024 1:23pm
Dear MS,
Bravo! The meter and visual images you created are superb. And might I add, with a rhyming scheme that would’ve done me in. I enjoyed this format and always the subject matter.
Lovely write. H🌷
Bravo! The meter and visual images you created are superb. And might I add, with a rhyming scheme that would’ve done me in. I enjoyed this format and always the subject matter.
Lovely write. H🌷
20th Sep 2024 10:33pm
Rhyme schemes can be beastly, but I always enjoy the process of overcoming the scheme challenge with the wording of the rest of the line.
If I recall correctly, this one is dirivitive of those used by Petrarch and Elizabeth Barrett Browning, among others, and is a nice change of pace from my Shakespearean default scheme.
Very glad you enjoyed 🌹
If I recall correctly, this one is dirivitive of those used by Petrarch and Elizabeth Barrett Browning, among others, and is a nice change of pace from my Shakespearean default scheme.
Very glad you enjoyed 🌹
2nd Oct 2024 10:28pm
"where daybreak birdsong is the morning fate
of the Harvest moon and all of her beams...
plowing the whole night...
our field of dreams!"
Loved the format here, we know it's coming and the spacing and pause give that effect.
Excellent work.
of the Harvest moon and all of her beams...
plowing the whole night...
our field of dreams!"
Loved the format here, we know it's coming and the spacing and pause give that effect.
Excellent work.
I think it was in reading...
ALL the SONNETS of SHAKESPEARE:
(ISBN 978-1-108-49039-9)
Edited by Paul Edmondson and Stanley Wells...where I got clued in to how Shakespeare uses the sonnet as a kind of springboard into the structure of his plays, and specifically the soliloquies.
And I've been a believer ever since. 🤓
ALL the SONNETS of SHAKESPEARE:
(ISBN 978-1-108-49039-9)
Edited by Paul Edmondson and Stanley Wells...where I got clued in to how Shakespeare uses the sonnet as a kind of springboard into the structure of his plays, and specifically the soliloquies.
And I've been a believer ever since. 🤓
