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Parasite
I'm alive
I find that a surprise.
I lost my sight.
Mostly just hypnotized.
Can't see the light.
Can't stand upright.
Wont attempt to fight.
No soldiers plight.
No courageous might.
Just endless night.
Just anger and spite.
I'm so uptight.
No more twilight.
No prayer to recite.
I'm just a parasite.
When you sleep, I bite.
I find that a surprise.
I lost my sight.
Mostly just hypnotized.
Can't see the light.
Can't stand upright.
Wont attempt to fight.
No soldiers plight.
No courageous might.
Just endless night.
Just anger and spite.
I'm so uptight.
No more twilight.
No prayer to recite.
I'm just a parasite.
When you sleep, I bite.
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Re. Parasite
21st Aug 2024 1:03pm
Great flow & rhymes in this poem.
You better wash and fumigate your room & bed sheets!
You better wash and fumigate your room & bed sheets!
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21st Aug 2024 1:07pm
Thanks! I think I'm just gonna roll around in them, then sleep in your bed :D
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21st Aug 2024 1:08pm
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21st Aug 2024 1:13pm
Re. Parasite
I only see that the human being deserves much respect, recognition,and not being a thing overlooked.But respected and given due worth as such, We are poets after all, we must be given higher esteem and Love.
Nice work this one, i love the way you portray this poem.Hamid
Nice work this one, i love the way you portray this poem.Hamid
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Re: Re. Parasite
21st Aug 2024 1:12pm
Thank you for the kind words! Being kind to someone in need is always the right thing to do!
Re: Re. Parasite
21st Aug 2024 1:15pm
We need kindness and respect and Love, is better that given money
with one hand, and the other hand slaps in the face.
with one hand, and the other hand slaps in the face.
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Re. Parasite
21st Aug 2024 2:43pm
Early in the poem I noticed the use of vowel sound rhyme to maintain connectivity while avoiding monotony. That is good poetry. I enjoyed this one a lot.
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Re: Re. Parasite
21st Aug 2024 2:48pm
Yeah I probably should have done that more. Thanks for honest feedback! I appreciate :)
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Re. Parasite
23rd Aug 2024 00:57am
Great freaking flow and ending, you remind us of a poetess from another site, Tight
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23rd Aug 2024 00:59am
Coool. If you want to send me a link in an email maybe I'll check her out