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Acquired
I've swam deep vast oceans.
I've burned in voraciously raging
fires of devotion.
Needing that unknown more
in attempt to satiate my core.
You are the golden treasure
upon my soul's floor
You are the awe
in a star glistened night's allure.
You are a ruby blood scarlet twilight.
In my heart's empire a blinding light.
From the wondrous world of you,
my desire refuses to tire.
Forever would exist as never,
unless you are acquired.
I've burned in voraciously raging
fires of devotion.
Needing that unknown more
in attempt to satiate my core.
You are the golden treasure
upon my soul's floor
You are the awe
in a star glistened night's allure.
You are a ruby blood scarlet twilight.
In my heart's empire a blinding light.
From the wondrous world of you,
my desire refuses to tire.
Forever would exist as never,
unless you are acquired.
Published 31st Jul 2024
Author's Note
Choosing dreams over depression today.
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31st Jul 2024 8:16pm
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31st Jul 2024 8:22pm
Has an inspirational, uplifting vibe. Like the wording you used as well as the flow. The image is awesome and so are you!
31st Jul 2024 8:44pm
1st Aug 2024 1:16am
Ah dreams should always win. Depression is a lying ho-bag. Lovely as always, D-bear
1st Aug 2024 3:02pm
Depression is a ho- bag. Unfortunately it's a daily fight.
I love all my friends on here who uplift me, thank you!
I love all my friends on here who uplift me, thank you!
2nd Aug 2024 1:22am
2nd Aug 2024 1:07pm
3rd Aug 2024 3:10am
This is pretty good, especially the transition you create in the "scenery" in the first part of the poem. Pretty smooth in delivery and conveying your style, from swimming in the ocean, to the magma, to the "floor" and treasure - you pulled off an artistic delivery in how you present it. Anyway, overall, I like this. It's very expressive, in a fascinatingly creative way, or at least that's the emotion that I got from it, heh. Keep putting pen to pad, hopefully, and I'll see you around!
3rd Aug 2024 12:55pm
Thanks so much for the feedback, I appreciate it so much.
I'm so glad you liked it
I'm so glad you liked it
Anonymous
3rd Aug 2024 2:29pm
This is infused with such emotion & depth. Dreams over depression indeed. Beautifully crafted
3rd Aug 2024 5:45pm
