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Skyscraper
I'm at the intersection
Of 19 and Ettie Street
Gazing up with my
Amazed Texan eyes
And it's way too high
Up there - Inside
His sky rise Florida eyes
To see me
62 stories of classic
Male architecture
It gives me vertigo
But I'm ready-set-go
When it opens
On the first story
His golden heart
Elevator plays
Black Sabbath's
Children Of the Sea
Then recites poetry
Conquistadora by Styxian
In his deep soft voice
Such a non fiction
Contradiction
And I've fallen to
The top glazed floor
Being courageous
Stepping out onto the
Cliff balcony
With arms wide open
Assured with the
Sleek mirror windows
That light up to watch me
Holding everything
Together with a
Spine made of metal
My gorgeous Skyscraper
Without any age barriers
To re-examine
Or any guard rails
For protection
Unafraid of plummeting
Into "as is"
Into love
It's too late anyway
Of 19 and Ettie Street
Gazing up with my
Amazed Texan eyes
And it's way too high
Up there - Inside
His sky rise Florida eyes
To see me
62 stories of classic
Male architecture
It gives me vertigo
But I'm ready-set-go
When it opens
On the first story
His golden heart
Elevator plays
Black Sabbath's
Children Of the Sea
Then recites poetry
Conquistadora by Styxian
In his deep soft voice
Such a non fiction
Contradiction
And I've fallen to
The top glazed floor
Being courageous
Stepping out onto the
Cliff balcony
With arms wide open
Assured with the
Sleek mirror windows
That light up to watch me
Holding everything
Together with a
Spine made of metal
My gorgeous Skyscraper
Without any age barriers
To re-examine
Or any guard rails
For protection
Unafraid of plummeting
Into "as is"
Into love
It's too late anyway
Author's Note
I'm in a great place.
I'm pulling up a lawn chair
and basking in the warmth:)
I'm pulling up a lawn chair
and basking in the warmth:)
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Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 3:20am
The...okay, I'll say it- architecture of this poem is brilliant. And aesthetically, it is simply gorgeous.
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Re: Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 3:27am
Hey Pink!
Awww - thank you so very much:)
I'm a chicken when it comes to skyscrapers.
I can go up a few flights but anything over five!!
Yikes!! It takes me a minute to adjust.
thanks for stopping by for a read!
And the RL:))
Awww - thank you so very much:)
I'm a chicken when it comes to skyscrapers.
I can go up a few flights but anything over five!!
Yikes!! It takes me a minute to adjust.
thanks for stopping by for a read!
And the RL:))
Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 3:33am
This sounds like the tower over by The Alamo, strange tingling vertigo looking up, looking down, looking out, but what a view!
Just like your love. The view from the ground is stunning.
Just like your love. The view from the ground is stunning.
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Re: Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 3:42am
Hi Betty!
I always get a small case of vertigo. Even in the stairwells.
And well he's tall. LOL
And the view is stunning:)
I haven't been to The Alamo in ages!!
thanks for stopping by for a read!
I always get a small case of vertigo. Even in the stairwells.
And well he's tall. LOL
And the view is stunning:)
I haven't been to The Alamo in ages!!
thanks for stopping by for a read!
Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 3:50am
Styxian's poems are like skyscrapers themselves. He's the luckiest guy in the world to have you.
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Re: Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 3:59am
Hey there Tim!
Aww - thank you for saying that:)
I've been fortunate for a lot of things in my life lately
He's definitely been my rock.
thanks for stopping by and leaving a great comment!
Aww - thank you for saying that:)
I've been fortunate for a lot of things in my life lately
He's definitely been my rock.
thanks for stopping by and leaving a great comment!
Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 4:05am
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16th Jun 2024 4:12am
Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 11:15am
Dear A,
Fantastic use of metaphor. Beautiful expression of love. Fabulous homage. I enjoyed this poem from start to finish. The story you tell and picture you paint are simply gorgeous. A delightful gift for Father’s Day and love in general.
H🌷
Fantastic use of metaphor. Beautiful expression of love. Fabulous homage. I enjoyed this poem from start to finish. The story you tell and picture you paint are simply gorgeous. A delightful gift for Father’s Day and love in general.
H🌷
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Re: Re. Skyscraper
17th Jun 2024 2:22am
Hi Honoria!
I'm in the love mood and I gotta write it out. Being focused on
positivity feels empowering. And I think skyscrapers are so beautiful.
My oldest son visited The Summit in New York and did a video. He sent it to me, and I was captivated by the lights
and the height. all of that glass - it would have taken me
a minute to steady myself because I'd get vertigo - but what an experience watching. And I wasn't event there!!
There were even mirror balloons floating around in the background. It was so freaking cool!!
Thanks for the RL and stopping by:))
I'm in the love mood and I gotta write it out. Being focused on
positivity feels empowering. And I think skyscrapers are so beautiful.
My oldest son visited The Summit in New York and did a video. He sent it to me, and I was captivated by the lights
and the height. all of that glass - it would have taken me
a minute to steady myself because I'd get vertigo - but what an experience watching. And I wasn't event there!!
There were even mirror balloons floating around in the background. It was so freaking cool!!
Thanks for the RL and stopping by:))
Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 11:20am
It's a great story ... you two !
Happy for you as forging love later in life is no easy task buy certainly fun ..
Congrats 👏
BIG LIKE
Happy for you as forging love later in life is no easy task buy certainly fun ..
Congrats 👏
BIG LIKE
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Re: Re. Skyscraper
17th Jun 2024 2:35am
Hey PS!
Later in life is the best. We got all of the messy stuff out of the way before meeting. LOL
He's a hoot!
(that's Mark's word btw- hoot)
I left a comment on one of his writes when he first got here
and he told me I was a hoot! I still tease him about it to this day! It just sounded so Leave it to Beaver. hahaha
thanks for stopping by for a comment amigo!
Later in life is the best. We got all of the messy stuff out of the way before meeting. LOL
He's a hoot!
(that's Mark's word btw- hoot)
I left a comment on one of his writes when he first got here
and he told me I was a hoot! I still tease him about it to this day! It just sounded so Leave it to Beaver. hahaha
thanks for stopping by for a comment amigo!
Re: Re. Skyscraper
17th Jun 2024 2:54am
You are a hoot, Del! What did you think reeled me in, your big... smiles?
And honey, I will never leave that beaver!
Oh crap, you meant that show, huh?
(Humor is the thread that holds us together. Perfect!)
And honey, I will never leave that beaver!
Oh crap, you meant that show, huh?
(Humor is the thread that holds us together. Perfect!)
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Re: Re. Skyscraper
17th Jun 2024 3:05am
Well duh - I totally know it was my personality first.
and for the beaver comment well - maybe I should have
said The Andy Griffin Show instead.
I know I remind you of Aunt Bee because I love to cook!
Yeah, yeah, that's it - that's what I meant! hahahaha
and for the beaver comment well - maybe I should have
said The Andy Griffin Show instead.
I know I remind you of Aunt Bee because I love to cook!
Yeah, yeah, that's it - that's what I meant! hahahaha
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17th Jun 2024 3:07am
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Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 12:59pm
That last line, just Wow! The imagery throughout this gave me vertigo just reading it!
The metaphoric nature and imagery of this is excellent, Adelphina.
The metaphoric nature and imagery of this is excellent, Adelphina.
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Re: Re. Skyscraper
17th Jun 2024 2:40am
Hi Ahavati!
I'm glad I'm not the only one to get vertigo.
Good to know I'm not alone:)
You know - whenever we get into new relationships we always
look for red flags or caution signs, but sometimes you just click with someone. You forget to keep an eye out. it feels that natural. That's why I added that line:)
thanks for the RL and stopping by:)
I'm glad I'm not the only one to get vertigo.
Good to know I'm not alone:)
You know - whenever we get into new relationships we always
look for red flags or caution signs, but sometimes you just click with someone. You forget to keep an eye out. it feels that natural. That's why I added that line:)
thanks for the RL and stopping by:)
Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 3:12pm
I'm amazed at the structure & clever use of imagery & words in this poem. I'd say you're rocking the best inspiration found. The 2 of you continue to inspire hope!
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Re: Re. Skyscraper
17th Jun 2024 2:56am
Hey there Willow!
I'd been working on it for a couple of days here and there.
Thank you for letting me know it paid off:)
Life takes you down some pretty messed up places.
We should always strive to find hope.
It's so worth it:)
I'd been working on it for a couple of days here and there.
Thank you for letting me know it paid off:)
Life takes you down some pretty messed up places.
We should always strive to find hope.
It's so worth it:)
Re. Skyscraper
16th Jun 2024 4:18pm
My love, you will never, ever, fall. Sometimes I'm too much like a stoic tree inside. But, you're the ornament over me that sets me aglow. What a beautiful light you are. You make my life a holiday.
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Re: Re. Skyscraper
17th Jun 2024 3:09am
I love that you're stoic inside. It makes it 100 times better when I see you melt baby. hehehe
I adore that face - even when it tries to be immobile and unaffected because you never commit. You always end up softening up and calling me your babydoll. What a blessed superpower I have - getting you to smile. Best gift ever!
Love you honey!
I adore that face - even when it tries to be immobile and unaffected because you never commit. You always end up softening up and calling me your babydoll. What a blessed superpower I have - getting you to smile. Best gift ever!
Love you honey!
Re. Skyscraper
18th Jun 2024 1:19am
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Today 2:37am
Hi Cisco:)
It sure has!
I'm love stricken at the moment:)
As always, thank you for stopping by for a comment
It sure has!
I'm love stricken at the moment:)
As always, thank you for stopping by for a comment
Re. Skyscraper
18th Jun 2024 7:18pm
It's all the stories that build the structure, isn't it? That vertigo feeling of it all & that last line are amazing!
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Today 2:39am
Hi Con:)
It was just what I had in my mind. all the glamour
of being in love and having it being reciprocated. Best
feeling ever:)
Thanks for stopping by for a comment!!
It was just what I had in my mind. all the glamour
of being in love and having it being reciprocated. Best
feeling ever:)
Thanks for stopping by for a comment!!