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Salvation (Written With DampKitten)
I’ve tasted your scars
Made love to your agony
Stolen your darkness
You took it without asking
Our love did not deserve that
I’ve shackled your soul
Muffled passion with duct tape
Seared you with silence
You are my light in darkness
I will give you everything
I’ll take what I want
A slave to my affection
Kneeling to the end
I can feel my heart melting
My death is your salvation
Made love to your agony
Stolen your darkness
You took it without asking
Our love did not deserve that
I’ve shackled your soul
Muffled passion with duct tape
Seared you with silence
You are my light in darkness
I will give you everything
I’ll take what I want
A slave to my affection
Kneeling to the end
I can feel my heart melting
My death is your salvation
Written by
fianaturie8
(Fia Naturie)
Published 14th Jun 2024
Author's Note
I enjoyed working with Dampkitten. This turned out pretty cool. Thank you. This is for the Renga competition
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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14th Jun 2024 3:49am
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14th Jun 2024 10:30am
Ok I can feel my heart melting … you two are amazing poetesses… amazing everything… amazing… oh god.. now my tongue is melting
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14th Jun 2024 11:40am
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14th Jun 2024 1:55pm
Behave… we’re in a public site… and don’t moan too load … otherwise people would know
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14th Jun 2024 1:08pm
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14th Jun 2024 1:22pm
Re. Salvation (Written With DampKitten)
14th Jun 2024 2:08pm
What a sacrifice poem !
one must die to let the other live..
Fine interpretation and collaboration..Fia
Stay safe and active always.. regards .
one must die to let the other live..
Fine interpretation and collaboration..Fia
Stay safe and active always.. regards .
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14th Jun 2024 2:10pm
Re. Salvation (Written With DampKitten)
15th Jun 2024 4:10am
I love the back-and-forth. Feels kind of like a call-and-response situation.
My only feedback would be that it's too short! I feel like the two of you started something good here, just extend on it. :)
My only feedback would be that it's too short! I feel like the two of you started something good here, just extend on it. :)
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15th Jun 2024 12:06pm