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Fools Rush In
I was told to wait
I could not
I needed to know
This very second
This very moment
Then I seen
What I Should not
Their longing looks
Their breaths as they shook
Their lips as they took
A revelation
or more of a shock
I wanted
She wanted
He wanted
But I was not the one he wanted
I could not
I needed to know
This very second
This very moment
Then I seen
What I Should not
Their longing looks
Their breaths as they shook
Their lips as they took
A revelation
or more of a shock
I wanted
She wanted
He wanted
But I was not the one he wanted
Published 1st Jun 2024
Author's Note
We were all young once and wanted someone who did not want us. Crushes is the perfect word of what is felt.
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2nd Jun 2024 00:40am
From what I read, I thought initially you had accidentally stumbled in on your fella fucking another girl!
2nd Jun 2024 00:43am
Haha no was listening to Fools rush in by Elvis Presley and my mind wondered.
2nd Jun 2024 00:47am
2nd Jun 2024 00:58am
2nd Jun 2024 1:01am
2nd Jun 2024 6:08am
We all been there, unfortunately.
Going too fast, being too impatient, too impulsive - and so we grow.
Amazing write, dear Fia, one that resonates 💕
Going too fast, being too impatient, too impulsive - and so we grow.
Amazing write, dear Fia, one that resonates 💕
4th Jun 2024 11:18pm
4th Jun 2024 11:20pm
9th Jun 2024 5:31pm
Loved this poem! The progression from impatience to revelation to heartbreak is beautifully portrayed. The theme is incredibly relatable for anyone who has faced unrequited love or a moment of unwelcome truth. Great piece!
9th Jun 2024 5:33pm
