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Driftwood
almost girl
too outside
your stars are broken
your galaxies are sleeping
fading moonlight
transparent against the flowers
we burn our disasters in the fire
flickering. hesitant.
-unbetrayal her
she's a freedom angel
falling quietly, through music rain
into this nothing which we are
all bright and warm colours
Published 1st Jun 2024
Author's Note
A February 2021 poem, that I've chopped two stanzas off and then edited.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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1st Jun 2024 10:24pm
Well, the repetition works for me. Eclectic and romantic, with an easy flow. Thanks for rehearing 🌼
7th Jun 2024 8:01pm
7th Jun 2024 8:06pm
3rd Aug 2024 4:21pm
This feels like freedom in the letting-go, like an antidote for the need to control. Hell can be Heaven if you take comfort in the fall.
3rd Aug 2024 5:35pm
Absolutely Ben. I don't think we are ever physically free, but mentally, I'm soaring rather than falling.
Thank you. Hope you are keeping well 😁
Thank you. Hope you are keeping well 😁
25th Sep 2024 2:11pm
25th Sep 2024 2:17pm
Diolch yn fawr, Oral.
Pleased you think so 😁
For taking the time to say and leave your thoughts.
Pleased you think so 😁
For taking the time to say and leave your thoughts.
