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I Want to Feel You
As I lie in bed in yet another cold room.
I wonder if I'll ever get my wish before my doom.
I long to feel your body close to mine.
To feast on your nipples in my mouth or dine.
Our lips crashing together sucking every breath
out of our mouths like a throbbing wisp of death.
While I submerse my soul inside your heart
and explode every last drop in each part.
I want to feel every inch of mine, thrust
in yours, before I finally turn to dust.
I want to hear your moans echo my name
Losing myself in you as you do the same.
I wonder if I'll ever get my wish before my doom.
I long to feel your body close to mine.
To feast on your nipples in my mouth or dine.
Our lips crashing together sucking every breath
out of our mouths like a throbbing wisp of death.
While I submerse my soul inside your heart
and explode every last drop in each part.
I want to feel every inch of mine, thrust
in yours, before I finally turn to dust.
I want to hear your moans echo my name
Losing myself in you as you do the same.
Published 11th Apr 2024
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11th Apr 2024 5:11pm
hello dearest Sam good morning
this is beautifully erotic...I fell in love with your poem 💕
this is beautifully erotic...I fell in love with your poem 💕
11th Apr 2024 5:12pm
not as much as I fell in love with your comment this early morning... thank you
11th Apr 2024 5:58pm
11th Apr 2024 6:11pm
11th Apr 2024 7:33pm
"I want to feel every inch of mine, thrust
in yours, before I finally turn to dust."
Preferably not in a session that leads to me becoming dust!
in yours, before I finally turn to dust."
Preferably not in a session that leads to me becoming dust!
11th Apr 2024 7:35pm
11th Apr 2024 11:45pm
your longing and desperation. The repetition of "I want to feel you" hammers home the intensity of the craving, while the metaphorical language - "feast on your nipples," "submerse my soul," "explode every last drop" - heightens the erotic tension.
your final lines, with the echoing of names and the mutual "losing" of self, convey a profound merging of bodies and spirits - a transcendent moment of ecstasy and surrender. Overall, this is a raw, evocative piece that taps into the most carnal and vulnerable aspects of the human experience. Well done in capturing the visceral essence of physical intimacy and romantic obsession.
your final lines, with the echoing of names and the mutual "losing" of self, convey a profound merging of bodies and spirits - a transcendent moment of ecstasy and surrender. Overall, this is a raw, evocative piece that taps into the most carnal and vulnerable aspects of the human experience. Well done in capturing the visceral essence of physical intimacy and romantic obsession.
