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#Prisoner#
i am a prisoner
of my mind who
craves control
over my soul
& my thoughts
Over my belly
i let her in gave
her a home of
which She is
now the owner
it's lonely here
cold & hopeless
She won't let me
listen to my needs
won't give me the
proper nutrients
i'm stuck in this
prison and i can't
seem to break free
am i sentenced to life?
of my mind who
craves control
over my soul
& my thoughts
Over my belly
i let her in gave
her a home of
which She is
now the owner
it's lonely here
cold & hopeless
She won't let me
listen to my needs
won't give me the
proper nutrients
i'm stuck in this
prison and i can't
seem to break free
am i sentenced to life?
Author's Note
Written for the Prisoner contest.
https://youtu.be/rEXhAMtbaec
https://youtu.be/rEXhAMtbaec
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Re. #Prisoner#
22nd Mar 2024 2:38pm
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22nd Mar 2024 5:12pm
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22nd Mar 2024 3:53pm
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22nd Mar 2024 5:12pm
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22nd Mar 2024 5:19pm
Perhaps a D/s relationship provides the guardrails and integrity brought by intimacy, respect, mutuality, and domination.
Negotiation reaches beyond settling.
Negotiation reaches beyond settling.
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22nd Mar 2024 5:28pm
So true, giving the control away is something I deeply desire, could definitely be of great help.
It takes time, patience and trust...
It takes time, patience and trust...
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25th Mar 2024 1:07pm
Satisfaction seems to be the overlap in a ven diagram....
And the part needed is in some secret box.
I've decided that tending a flower garden makes that happen... time, patience, and trust.
Blossoms are a reflection of that overlap....for me.
And the part needed is in some secret box.
I've decided that tending a flower garden makes that happen... time, patience, and trust.
Blossoms are a reflection of that overlap....for me.
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26th Mar 2024 4:28am
"I've decided that tending a flower garden makes that happen"
Exactly that, couldn't have said it better :-)
Exactly that, couldn't have said it better :-)
Re. #Prisoner#
22nd Mar 2024 3:57pm
I found the poem to be realtable but I was also interested in your artistic expression with the picture you chose... stitched lips with a hangman's noose I wonder about the message here... it's like your damned if you do damned if you don't cause even if you rip the stitches to speak the hangman's noose will hang you on your words... great self-expression and art...
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22nd Mar 2024 5:13pm
Ah, dear Crim, this one was (once again) about my eating disorder. Bulimia, though it might look like anorexia. The continuous struggle with food.
I always try to find another image for each piece and I found this one to be suitable for the prisoner contest - my mouth behind bars. Thank you for your amazing comment 💕
I always try to find another image for each piece and I found this one to be suitable for the prisoner contest - my mouth behind bars. Thank you for your amazing comment 💕
Re. #Prisoner#
22nd Mar 2024 4:03pm
Oh yeah!!
This is one helluva entry Duende
The words and the pic is just sublime ....
This is one helluva entry Duende
The words and the pic is just sublime ....
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22nd Mar 2024 5:14pm
Oh wow, Naajir, what an awesome comment.
Great to hear you think it's a good entry, thanks heaps.
Great to hear you think it's a good entry, thanks heaps.
Re. #Prisoner#
22nd Mar 2024 6:09pm
Hoi hoi
Hope this finds you well.
Which is so much gentler than ‘alles goed?’
And I hope that what I have in mind to say, doesn’t anger you.
I’ve been reading a lot of your writes. And I honestly believe that your writes and artwork have made (you have made I mean) a giant step forward.
Vibrant like a 28 year old, razor sharp.
Truly marvellous.
I hope that I can be the semi loco plaatsvervangende voorzitter of your fanclub.
Keep them coming please!
Kind regards, Gus
Hope this finds you well.
Which is so much gentler than ‘alles goed?’
And I hope that what I have in mind to say, doesn’t anger you.
I’ve been reading a lot of your writes. And I honestly believe that your writes and artwork have made (you have made I mean) a giant step forward.
Vibrant like a 28 year old, razor sharp.
Truly marvellous.
I hope that I can be the semi loco plaatsvervangende voorzitter of your fanclub.
Keep them coming please!
Kind regards, Gus
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23rd Mar 2024 2:03am
Vibrant like a 28 year old, razor sharp > that's a huge compliment, Gus.
I didn't make me angry, quite the opposite, I did make giant steps - writing being very cathartic and therapeutic for me. I have much more in draft ;-)
Thanks heaps for your comment.
I didn't make me angry, quite the opposite, I did make giant steps - writing being very cathartic and therapeutic for me. I have much more in draft ;-)
Thanks heaps for your comment.
Re. #Prisoner#
22nd Mar 2024 7:48pm
It's the worst! The prison bars of out mind are so hard stage a jail break! This is a stellar (haunting) piece. Good luck in the comp, little sis!
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23rd Mar 2024 2:03am
Yes, it's the worst and a jail break is nearly impossible.
I won't stop trying and fighting.
Thanks heaps for your comment, sister mine.
I won't stop trying and fighting.
Thanks heaps for your comment, sister mine.