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On watching animated films on a strange and silent afternoon
I am looking at Pinocchio fold
into piles of pine. Watching
the joints slide backwards
until the lie takes over
and gravity becomes a cold bed
in which to lay the bones down.
I think of my own body
splintering in what can’t be seen.
How this day comes and there
is nothing, but a dark whale
and the tenacity to escape.
Did anybody tell him
years later, in his trauma,
that it is better to be made of wood
than to eternally be made of stone.
I am looking at Pinocchio fold
into piles of pine. Watching
the chaotic needles collapse
into jagged nests of fear,
and I wonder how many hearts
have heard the talk, followed
those footsteps in the crowd
and dreamed of being real
in some world
some form.
Published 6th Mar 2024
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06.03.08
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6th Mar 2024 2:34pm
I love Pinocchio. Great take using Pinocchio into a serious topic such as domestic violence. A great poem by the way.
6th Mar 2024 6:51pm
7th Mar 2024 11:37am
"Watching the chaotic needles collapse
into jagged nests of fear," is a remarkable line.
I enjoyed the piece as a whole, but in reading it the style lended itself to allowing for all the gems within to pop.
A really strong structure.
into jagged nests of fear," is a remarkable line.
I enjoyed the piece as a whole, but in reading it the style lended itself to allowing for all the gems within to pop.
A really strong structure.
7th Mar 2024 3:09pm
There’s something unusual about this poem that I can’t pin down. I found the title to rather potent, with the juxtaposition of animated cartoons and strange and silent. Taken with its poem, it evokes a troubling, unsettling sense.
11th Mar 2024 6:52pm
Thank you. I'm super glad you picked up on that because the unsettled, troubling sense was something I was aiming for. I think Pinocchio is dark enough on its own, meaning it was the perfect metaphor to apply to strange circumstances, or the memories of them.
Thank you for your thoughts on this. Much appreciated.
-M
Thank you for your thoughts on this. Much appreciated.
-M
10th Mar 2024 2:30am
11th Mar 2024 00:34am
Perfect.
You write with such a keen sense of soulful awareness. Of little self pity and more the folly of dealing with our human frailty, be it physical or philosophical.
A current bible would contain the Book Of Missy.
You write with such a keen sense of soulful awareness. Of little self pity and more the folly of dealing with our human frailty, be it physical or philosophical.
A current bible would contain the Book Of Missy.
12th Mar 2024 2:26pm
Quite the compliment there. Thanks you for taking the time to read and to offer the praise. I'm humbled.
-M
-M
12th Mar 2024 10:30am
