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Questionable existence
Can you feel what I'm saying?
Can you see what I'm touching?
Can you taste what I'm hearing?
Well I can't.
Maybe because I'm here.
Or is it because I'm not here.
I really don't know.
Visions of nothingness drift through my subconscious.
My dream world could be your reality.
Can you see what I'm touching?
Can you taste what I'm hearing?
Well I can't.
Maybe because I'm here.
Or is it because I'm not here.
I really don't know.
Visions of nothingness drift through my subconscious.
My dream world could be your reality.
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Re. Questionable existence
22nd Jan 2024 7:49pm
Wow! That was, wow, really really good.
I love the questions incorporating all the senses.
I'm going to love your writing......
I love the questions incorporating all the senses.
I'm going to love your writing......
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22nd Jan 2024 7:50pm
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22nd Jan 2024 9:01pm
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22nd Jan 2024 8:42pm
"Could it be that somebody else is looking into my mind, some other place, somewhere, some other time."
Interesting poem.
Interesting poem.
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22nd Jan 2024 9:01pm
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23rd Jan 2024 9:43pm
I love the line, 'Can you taste what I'm hearing?' This write feels like art too, if art could be written.
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23rd Jan 2024 9:55pm
Re. Questionable existence
Seeing that I've already swam a few strokes in your poetic pool of thought, it is interesting to go to your (or anyone's) 'origin story' here on DUP; take the temperature, so to speak. Getting a glimpse into the mindset, is such a treat and so helpful to gain insight, not just for any newcomer but for me, the long time member, too. It's a symbiotic give and take of ideas, encouragement and hopefully motivational inspiration.
I love the ideas that you play with in this one, interchanging dreams and reality; questioning one's own reason for being, essentially the entire world around us. Is this a plane of existence that's sustainable.... is there something more?
All these thoughts come to mind, for me... amongst many others. That's pretty impressive for such a succinctly structured piece!
Thanks for finding us here, my new friend.
Don't give up on the Deep Underground. It might frustrate you at times but there's something to be said for quality vs quantity!
I look forward to diving into more, as long as my chameleon life affords me the time to do so!
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I love the ideas that you play with in this one, interchanging dreams and reality; questioning one's own reason for being, essentially the entire world around us. Is this a plane of existence that's sustainable.... is there something more?
All these thoughts come to mind, for me... amongst many others. That's pretty impressive for such a succinctly structured piece!
Thanks for finding us here, my new friend.
Don't give up on the Deep Underground. It might frustrate you at times but there's something to be said for quality vs quantity!
I look forward to diving into more, as long as my chameleon life affords me the time to do so!
🌹B
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31st Jan 2024 6:00pm
Thank you so much for diving into my back catalog. (I've been here a mere 8 days!) I agree with your statement. I appreciate the support and admiration you have for my work. Your an amazing asset to me, others and DUP. Look forward to ready many many more of your writings.
xo
Keith
xo
Keith
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9th Mar 2024 11:48am
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Re. Questionable existence
15th Jun 2024 1:17pm
We could dream of each other! Right next to each other! I really liked this! Wanted to check out your first poem here. Really good
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15th Jun 2024 5:10pm
Thank you ASD. I wrote much different in the early poems next to what I say now. I was more conservative and timid.
Thank you my wonderful friend!
Thank you my wonderful friend!