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Clouds of Desire
Enormous cloud masses
roam a still dark dawn sky.
Clouds will never reveal the why.
Ivory abyss's that are cotton lined.
They are the movement of our dreams.
The storm in my mind, rumbles,
with a thunder of remembrance.
Of every far, vast dream
that life denied my grasp.
I look around the enormous world,
................so very tiny am I.
A miniscule human still believing
in the reincarnation of large dreams.
While the sky flashes with a lightning of desire.
My heart replies with electric beams,
to herds of clouds passing bye.
If we only knew, what we desire, desires us too.
roam a still dark dawn sky.
Clouds will never reveal the why.
Ivory abyss's that are cotton lined.
They are the movement of our dreams.
The storm in my mind, rumbles,
with a thunder of remembrance.
Of every far, vast dream
that life denied my grasp.
I look around the enormous world,
................so very tiny am I.
A miniscule human still believing
in the reincarnation of large dreams.
While the sky flashes with a lightning of desire.
My heart replies with electric beams,
to herds of clouds passing bye.
If we only knew, what we desire, desires us too.
Written by
deliabear
(Debbie)
Published 21st Jan 2024
Author's Note
Don't abandon your dreams.......
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Re. Clouds of Desire
21st Jan 2024 4:32pm
Mmmmmm.
I always get lost in your words. Your large dream is just around the corner, girl.
I always get lost in your words. Your large dream is just around the corner, girl.
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21st Jan 2024 4:55pm
Re. Clouds of Desire
21st Jan 2024 9:59pm
This has more succinct and concise language in the metaphors but is also still very moving. The brevity you use to draw together the analogies makes it easier to understand the emotion and relation. I like some of how you built upon each concept and transitioned well into drawing concepts together. Overall, good job. That's just some of what I noticed, heh. Anyway, thanks for sharing, and take care!
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21st Jan 2024 11:07pm
Thanks so much for the feedback. I like that the emotion was easy to understand. I always love hearing from you.
Take care too!
Take care too!
Re. Clouds of Desire
22nd Jan 2024 00:40am
Fantabulous final line, Debbie, and the lines preceding it were excellent, too.👍 I've nominated it in the Poem of the Month comp., if that's OK?
Much love 💐
Much love 💐
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Re: Re. Clouds of Desire
22nd Jan 2024 1:04am
Hi! Thank you so much, I'm blushing. I so appreciate the nomination. Your comment cheered me up, so thank you!
May your night be ✨ magic
May your night be ✨ magic
Re. Clouds of Desire
22nd Jan 2024 1:43am
I like how your unspoken words are truly a blessing to all those that dream for the future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of there dreams 🙏🤫✍️
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22nd Jan 2024 1:50am
Thank you kindly. I am a fighter for those who dream.
If you can dream it, make it possible!!!!
If you can dream it, make it possible!!!!
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24th Jan 2024 00:21am
If you can manifest it from your own thoughts you can manifest it into reality 🤫😏💯
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Re. Clouds of Desire
22nd Jan 2024 1:46am
hello beautiful Debbie you are so talented...this is some gorgeous inking
I missed it yesterday I'm glad I got to read it today lovely one 💕
I missed it yesterday I'm glad I got to read it today lovely one 💕
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Re: Re. Clouds of Desire
22nd Jan 2024 1:55am
Thank you 😘
You know I feel the same way about you.
I read your words in the early morning hours and savor them.
I've been so inspired by so much of your writing!
So back at ya 💜
You know I feel the same way about you.
I read your words in the early morning hours and savor them.
I've been so inspired by so much of your writing!
So back at ya 💜
Re. Clouds of Desire
22nd Jan 2024 3:30am
Dear D,
Beautiful piece. Powerful message to not abandon self and aspirations. I liked the metaphor of clouds to inspire those ambitions. I like to think that’s why clouds are there so we can reach up and grab them to help us along (in addition to provide rain and natures nourishment 😊
Wonderful write. H🌷
Beautiful piece. Powerful message to not abandon self and aspirations. I liked the metaphor of clouds to inspire those ambitions. I like to think that’s why clouds are there so we can reach up and grab them to help us along (in addition to provide rain and natures nourishment 😊
Wonderful write. H🌷
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Re: Re. Clouds of Desire
22nd Jan 2024 10:12am
Thank you so very much. I've become quite intrigued by the sky. Clouds just look like dreams in the sky sometimes. I'm very happy you stopped bye and liked it. 🌺 🌨️
Re. Clouds of Desire
22nd Jan 2024 6:22pm
Enchanting and mesmerizing. You truly have a gift with your approach & delivery.
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Re: Re. Clouds of Desire
22nd Jan 2024 6:24pm
Hello, that is so nice of you to say! Thank u!
Happy you enjoyed.
I grapple with a lot of self doubt, I truly appreciate other writer's encouragement.
Happy you enjoyed.
I grapple with a lot of self doubt, I truly appreciate other writer's encouragement.
Re. Clouds of Desire
Anonymous
25th Jan 2024 6:45pm
So many possibilities...so much potential...we are indeed miniscule
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25th Jan 2024 7:27pm