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Ebon Night
It's a disguise in an ebon night
as you loosen your grip
on the throwaway cloak
Stepping out, from that shadow-gown
I had hoped you'd come
dressed so conveniently
As I slide the shadow aside
and expose how brave you are
The art of undressing lost
within this riot of shredding
streamers of dark and light
I never doubted my ability
but I thought you were beyond me
Until you opened your eyes
in such a way
as pools of dusky air
Like an Autumn night flickering
hinting of your long lost warmth
underneath your superficial coolness
Standing there so collected
Yet your nerves are thrashing you
same as mine
You're my jaguar by day
my godiva at night
Here, atop this pale horse
My hair; Your reins
My breath; Your pace
Listen as the room changes
our inner echoes clamoring
for attention
'Til a whisper from somewhere
suddenly less distant
It's your voice, cautious but raspy
Yet your eyes are set on dare
for me to partake of your deep-set wishes
No longer strangers;
I build your shoulders up, as
I fashion your hair up
As my hands begin a memory of you
that I will carry like a lozenge
melting down my throat
Wintergreen
No
Butter rum
Resurrecting your flavor
inside my mouth
when I think of you
during the lulls of breaks
When even just your name
tingles upon my tongue
Practiced
while I hold you down;
It's not to control you
It's to steady me
As I react to what
you want of me
During this commotion
of discovery
Our sounds muffled against our skins
The coo and the growls
My lips pushing against your shoulder
as I feel you coming exposed
with each fractured gasp
As I, now hoarse, mouth your name
Multiple syllables flicking off
of my tongue
In sparks, those early ignitions
as the explosions come
Intertwined, our boneless bodies
coil like serpents sinning
as dawn unfolds a rapturous morning
Tho I am still blinded
to all that isn't you
~
Tonight, they will tell us
indeed, there was a today
While we slept through the sun
as it sought power
from the firelit rages
that we've become
It called your name
Pleaded for me to let you alone
No, sun, she remains with me
under the ebony blanket
Our eyes making movies
for one another
Highlighting how we shone
We are the only stars
in this ebon room.
~~~
Published 13th Jan 2024
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I adore this. It's just...Styx, it's golden.
I've done a thing and popped it for Poem of the Month. I don't think I've done that before, hope it goes well for you. It's a brilliant piece.
I've done a thing and popped it for Poem of the Month. I don't think I've done that before, hope it goes well for you. It's a brilliant piece.
14th Jan 2024 2:35am
Well thank you, very much, Stone. I must admit that I have a strong urge to hack at it a bit yet. It seems clumpy. No?
Also, I sincerely appreciate the nod for POM. But I've read several other poems this month, that are far more worthy than this one. Really. Including your own. To be considered in such a group is rewarding enough for me. I enjoy the company.
Thanks again!
Also, I sincerely appreciate the nod for POM. But I've read several other poems this month, that are far more worthy than this one. Really. Including your own. To be considered in such a group is rewarding enough for me. I enjoy the company.
Thanks again!
14th Jan 2024 4:03am
Well hello!
Buttered rum huh:)
The idea of resurrecting a taste of a lover is sublime babe. This whole piece - the intimacy is spot
on. Attention to details is your fine suite. I'm feeling all of the tongue tingles!! What!
This is luscious to read. My eyes were putty in your words:)
The pale horse stanza is intense.
You kept building the passion like the pro you are in all things.
I feel vey lucky to witness and see your zest for love and writing.
It's inspiring:)
And congratulations on the POM nod!
Yes - it's worthy my love!
Buttered rum huh:)
The idea of resurrecting a taste of a lover is sublime babe. This whole piece - the intimacy is spot
on. Attention to details is your fine suite. I'm feeling all of the tongue tingles!! What!
This is luscious to read. My eyes were putty in your words:)
The pale horse stanza is intense.
You kept building the passion like the pro you are in all things.
I feel vey lucky to witness and see your zest for love and writing.
It's inspiring:)
And congratulations on the POM nod!
Yes - it's worthy my love!
14th Jan 2024 7:04am
15th Jan 2024 00:15am
15th Jan 2024 2:22am
Well thanks y'all. I stared at it a bit and still see some rough patches. But I don't know what to do to fix it. Maybe I need whisky vision for it.
Yes!!!
Besides, I'm working on my "short" story now! So this one shall remain as is for now.
But I like the motivating kudos for sure. It's all about writing for us all. We are creators.
Yes!!!
Besides, I'm working on my "short" story now! So this one shall remain as is for now.
But I like the motivating kudos for sure. It's all about writing for us all. We are creators.
15th Jan 2024 3:35am
You have a way with words that really creates a dream-like scene and conveys emotion beautifully. I really like the play of shadows and clothing as interchangeable. The last two stanzas of denying the sun it’s request was really well done. 🌹
22nd Jan 2024 3:39am
Thank you very much Trillium.
I'm noticing that I'm writing a bit similar in my themes lately. So, I need to expand away somewhat I think. Yet, when certain thoughts and emotions are running havoc in the head, it's inevitable that the results will mirror that. It's not a bad thing at all! I'm glad that some readers find reward in it.
Thank you again.
I'm noticing that I'm writing a bit similar in my themes lately. So, I need to expand away somewhat I think. Yet, when certain thoughts and emotions are running havoc in the head, it's inevitable that the results will mirror that. It's not a bad thing at all! I'm glad that some readers find reward in it.
Thank you again.
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15th Jan 2024 1:37pm
Never seen building a memory so beautifully sensual & palpable. Incredible imagery & phrasing!
22nd Jan 2024 3:43am
It's appreciated, Confluence. I'm riding the wave of a new relationship, obviously. And yes, it's as new as day one. Neither her or I are boring. Maybe silly, even. Lol.
But the creative thoughts are there. And I will always have the urge to write. So thank you for letting me know that it's noticed positively. It does matter.
But the creative thoughts are there. And I will always have the urge to write. So thank you for letting me know that it's noticed positively. It does matter.
