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Blood Drops on the Snow
All the darkness in the world stems from the darkness of our own heart - unknown
Why do thoughts, darkly hideous,
plague the midnight mind?
He did not want my heart, he wanted
the gore beneath its scarlet rind.
I hemorrhaged flashing visions of
my crimson blood dripping on
virgin snow.
His sweet slashes
left my heart thrashing.
As he drank the fierce red ocean
that floats my soul below.
I smelled a rancid scent,
The mortal death's on his breath.
In a deep haunting whisper,
he revealed that I would cease to grow old.
If I drank from his slit vein,.
I'd be free of mortal pain.
Now with an insatiable thirst.
I shudder to think it can always be worse.
Why do thoughts, darkly hideous,
plague the midnight mind?
He did not want my heart, he wanted
the gore beneath its scarlet rind.
I hemorrhaged flashing visions of
my crimson blood dripping on
virgin snow.
His sweet slashes
left my heart thrashing.
As he drank the fierce red ocean
that floats my soul below.
I smelled a rancid scent,
The mortal death's on his breath.
In a deep haunting whisper,
he revealed that I would cease to grow old.
If I drank from his slit vein,.
I'd be free of mortal pain.
Now with an insatiable thirst.
I shudder to think it can always be worse.
Author's Note
Coffee thoughts 😊
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Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
7th Jan 2024 10:51am
Fantastic! I love the darkness and how the character questions their own thoughts. Awesome write!
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7th Jan 2024 11:09am
Thought dark is the way to go today, lol.
Nice hearing from you.
I truly appreciate your comment as I know you appreciate the dark. Thank you 🦇
Nice hearing from you.
I truly appreciate your comment as I know you appreciate the dark. Thank you 🦇
Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
7th Jan 2024 10:51am
Great imagery and flow! The thought of vampires while drinking coffee is interesting! Nice job on this poem, Debbie!
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Re: Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
7th Jan 2024 11:07am
😊 - I've always fantasized a vampire ( a sexy one, lol) would come and end my mortal pain, lol.
I truly appreciate you reading and your comments. Thank you!
I truly appreciate you reading and your comments. Thank you!
Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
7th Jan 2024 11:35am
Ah... vampires... love them... great flow with this... any coffee left...
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Re: Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
7th Jan 2024 11:49am
I would love to sit down and have coffee with you!
Vampires love you too 😊 🦇
Thx for checking out
Vampires love you too 😊 🦇
Thx for checking out
Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
Snow is death in your composition a hidden allegory of a wordl of Vampires and cold blood, when coffee in the midnight sucks your awakend spirit to roam thru darkness of the '' white snow''..
So much figures of speech are implicit here, thanks for sharing ''Debbie''
So much figures of speech are implicit here, thanks for sharing ''Debbie''
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Re: Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
7th Jan 2024 12:51pm
Thank your for checking it out and the nice feedback!
I really appreciate my friends here 😊
I really appreciate my friends here 😊
Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
7th Jan 2024 12:40pm
I’ve never had a thing for vampires but this may change my mind!
I love this, Debbie
I love this, Debbie
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7th Jan 2024 12:58pm
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Anonymous
7th Jan 2024 2:40pm
though vampires are considered evil by some, others see hope and change in them, almost like saviors. i guess it's all down to belief and disbelief.
your wording and rhymes are outstanding.
your wording and rhymes are outstanding.
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Re: Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
7th Jan 2024 2:50pm
Yes! I've always seen them as a saving force.
Thank you for the nice compliment!
Enjoy your day
Thank you for the nice compliment!
Enjoy your day
Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
7th Jan 2024 11:57pm
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8th Jan 2024 5:21am
Right now it's just Dunkin donuts I brew at home, lol.
Although I love love espresso. So when the coffee gets in my veins, look out, lol
Thank you for stopping bye!
Although I love love espresso. So when the coffee gets in my veins, look out, lol
Thank you for stopping bye!
Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
Anonymous
8th Jan 2024 2:34pm
This is deliciously dark! Relatable to anyone who's suffered a broken heart too. Wow!
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8th Jan 2024 2:56pm
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Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
8th Jan 2024 5:17pm
Haunting thoughts brought to life with your words, digging the poem delia.
LJ
LJ
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Re: Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
8th Jan 2024 6:10pm
Hey LJ, makes me feel happy you enjoyed!
Thank you for commenting and have a fabulous day.
Thank you for commenting and have a fabulous day.
Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
11th Jan 2024 4:28pm
I read it once and here I am again!
Kinda beautifully hot... but also scary because the thought of beautiful being promising such is just so dangerous...
<3
Kinda beautifully hot... but also scary because the thought of beautiful being promising such is just so dangerous...
<3
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Re: Re. Blood Drops on the Snow
11th Jan 2024 6:51pm
Hi! Welcome back. It is a dangerous fantasy. I've been know to crave the dangerous side.
I have an all white kitty, and when she yawns she has little fangs, lol
I have an all white kitty, and when she yawns she has little fangs, lol