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When We Least Expect
Love, one of the most beautiful things
we'll know during our years on earth
weaves like ether
through the years of our lives
until it catches up to us.
Or perhaps more like a silken sash
that draws near on a cold wind
wrapping around our neck
when we least expect.
The last days of our lives
are beaming gold
but Love is a piercing Light
that turns our tired mind
toward a direction beyond time.
After decades have dispersed
and we feel Love went on without us
it will approach regardless
rising slowly as a ghost
from past experience.
Our veins will pulse
we'll smell the incense,
as frankincense and myrrh
wavering off its soul.
It'll flash a smile,
innocence and knowing combined,
soft submission, brutal rebellion
and holy-purple poison in one.
A rare wildflower that blooms
with untamed madness
through a desert's marrow bones,
or water lilies spinning out of control
their roots fastening our nerves.
It bears the same features
as our lovers before
except this time crystal clear—
intact and unapologetic
about the intrusion at so late an hour.
Its bright eyes are almost unbearable,
and will be impossible to call a stranger.
No, it's a tribal stream blood brother,
past life lover, seer, soul twin, mirror—
anything but a lone stranger.
It will request submission
to the pinion hidden underneath its wing.
Our tongue, knotted until then
will innately unfurl a "Yes"
beyond our control.
Because seeing it will be like seeing ourselves
in a crowded lift of time
screeching upward
on ancient cables of existence—
the halo of its voice beaming
as its wing folds over us
saying
"Hey. . .I finally got you."
we'll know during our years on earth
weaves like ether
through the years of our lives
until it catches up to us.
Or perhaps more like a silken sash
that draws near on a cold wind
wrapping around our neck
when we least expect.
The last days of our lives
are beaming gold
but Love is a piercing Light
that turns our tired mind
toward a direction beyond time.
After decades have dispersed
and we feel Love went on without us
it will approach regardless
rising slowly as a ghost
from past experience.
Our veins will pulse
we'll smell the incense,
as frankincense and myrrh
wavering off its soul.
It'll flash a smile,
innocence and knowing combined,
soft submission, brutal rebellion
and holy-purple poison in one.
A rare wildflower that blooms
with untamed madness
through a desert's marrow bones,
or water lilies spinning out of control
their roots fastening our nerves.
It bears the same features
as our lovers before
except this time crystal clear—
intact and unapologetic
about the intrusion at so late an hour.
Its bright eyes are almost unbearable,
and will be impossible to call a stranger.
No, it's a tribal stream blood brother,
past life lover, seer, soul twin, mirror—
anything but a lone stranger.
It will request submission
to the pinion hidden underneath its wing.
Our tongue, knotted until then
will innately unfurl a "Yes"
beyond our control.
Because seeing it will be like seeing ourselves
in a crowded lift of time
screeching upward
on ancient cables of existence—
the halo of its voice beaming
as its wing folds over us
saying
"Hey. . .I finally got you."
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Re. When We Least Expect
The Angel of death as a representative of love is a tough one for me to wrap my head around,
but I'd be certifiable if I didn't LOVE your depiction:)
but I'd be certifiable if I didn't LOVE your depiction:)
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1st Jan 2024 2:50pm
MS, your unique perspective is refreshing as it is original and imaginative! I absolutely loved it! Happy you're not certifiable! May the New Year bring you much love and happiness! Thank you for all your support throughout the years. It's been invaluable to me, as has been your friendship! xo
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29th Dec 2023 00:48am
Wonderfully penned.
I hope you write more in the years to come.
We need your voice and sensibilities !!!
BIG LIKE
RL AWARD
HAPPY NEW YEAR
I hope you write more in the years to come.
We need your voice and sensibilities !!!
BIG LIKE
RL AWARD
HAPPY NEW YEAR
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1st Jan 2024 2:48pm
Ohhh A "BIG LIKE" from the New York Cowboy! What an awesome way to begin the year! I couldn't imagine this place without you either! Happiest of New Years to you and yours - may it bring all your dreams!
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29th Dec 2023 3:48am
What they said…
But OMG this stanza:
A rare wildflower that blooms
with untamed madness
through a desert's marrow bones,
or water lilies spinning out of control
their roots fastening our nerves.
I was riveted by the earthly pull and the use of life in the guise of a flower. That metaphor goes so damn deep. The cycle of rebirth, renewal, of sinking deep to the earth and rising from it, of stating new and ending in the same place, with all the world better for you having been in that place… oh… it’s a lovely bit of imagery. Really, it spoke to me.
Your entire piece read so clean and easy, and your storytelling is masterful as always.
But OMG this stanza:
A rare wildflower that blooms
with untamed madness
through a desert's marrow bones,
or water lilies spinning out of control
their roots fastening our nerves.
I was riveted by the earthly pull and the use of life in the guise of a flower. That metaphor goes so damn deep. The cycle of rebirth, renewal, of sinking deep to the earth and rising from it, of stating new and ending in the same place, with all the world better for you having been in that place… oh… it’s a lovely bit of imagery. Really, it spoke to me.
Your entire piece read so clean and easy, and your storytelling is masterful as always.
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1st Jan 2024 2:47pm
Betty Betty Betty! It's so like you to home in on the natural elements because I feel you resonate with them so much. Thank you for taking the time to share your observations; I love them! I am wishing you the happiest of years, filled with much love, happiness, peace, and prosperity in all that truly matters! xo
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29th Dec 2023 6:12am
Dear A,
For me, every stanza stands alone. Yet together the lifeline flows brilliantly. As though you’ve taken the reader from birth to death and then rebirth. It’s a beautiful write. xo 🏆 .
H🌷
For me, every stanza stands alone. Yet together the lifeline flows brilliantly. As though you’ve taken the reader from birth to death and then rebirth. It’s a beautiful write. xo 🏆 .
H🌷
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1st Jan 2024 2:45pm
Thank you so much, Honoria! I appreciate you and wish you the best that 2024 has to offer in all things that truly matter! xo
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29th Dec 2023 3:24pm
This is my favourite “type” among your poems, mysticism and prophesying anchored to true grit. Your use of heavy cables, water lilies, pinions, is the earth that makes this a poem, taking us out of ourselves by way of natural things, with a somewhat Asian/haiku-esque attention to the delicate image, infused with a Native religiosity.
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1st Jan 2024 2:44pm
Ohhh I love this observation, Mr. Karswell! Asian/haiku and Native religiosity warms my heart! Thank you for sharing and may 2024 bring you much love, peace, happiness, and prosperity in all the things that truly matter! xo
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29th Dec 2023 5:29pm
I read this & I think...well, maybe...but I also have the sharp edge of disappointment still stabbing me in back that argues maybe not. Hope isn't lost until we die though, yes?
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1st Jan 2024 2:43pm
Willow, as long as there's breath in our lungs, there's hope! Never give up! Happiest of New Years! It's so nice to see you back at DU!
Re. When We Least Expect
30th Dec 2023 00:23am
Love comes like beam of all ages. Even the golden ones.
This is exquisite. I enjoyed every stanza.
Gave me such wonderful feelings reading this:)
Thanks for posting!!!
This is exquisite. I enjoyed every stanza.
Gave me such wonderful feelings reading this:)
Thanks for posting!!!
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1st Jan 2024 2:42pm
Thank you, Adelphina! The golden years are when you really appreciate the value of love, I believe. I am happy this resonated so deeply with you! I wish you all the best that 2024 has to offer!
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30th Dec 2023 10:51am
This is an exceptionally crafted poem on the tricky topic of Love, containing some marvellous poetic devices. I am not overly adept at giving honest critique, but here goes:
This is such a mysterious and elegant poem, and Love is, in some aspects, beyond simple descriptions. Therefore the first two lines seem incongruously commonplace (beautiful, years of life … years on earth), particularly when seen against the second, marvellously poetic stanza. In fact, stanzas one and two could be tied nicely together, and serve as a delicate and mysterious path into the poem. Let the beautiful aspect be apparent rather than stated. For example, something like:
Love,
weaves like (an) ether
through our lives until —
like a silken sash
that draws near on a cold wind
(it) wraps (around) our neck
when we least expect.
The “Silken Sash” simile is perfect, readily understandable, and nicely anonymous as to the source of said sash. Perhaps my favourite stanza.
Going further, you could delay the introduction of Love a little:
It weaves like (an) ether
through our lives until —
like a silken sash
that draws near on a cold wind
Love wraps (around) our neck
when we least expect.
Anyway, the poem delightfully makes it clear that this is not human, romantic love, but the Love of that which we denote as God, Word, Spirit, with mentions of, holy purple-poison, frankincense, myrrh, gold, water lilies, desert, marrow bones.
(The last days of our lives
are beaming gold
but) Love is a piercing Light
that turns (our) tired minds
toward a direction beyond time.
The poem brings to mind “The Hound of Heaven”, and the final line is warm, and life-affirming.
This is such a mysterious and elegant poem, and Love is, in some aspects, beyond simple descriptions. Therefore the first two lines seem incongruously commonplace (beautiful, years of life … years on earth), particularly when seen against the second, marvellously poetic stanza. In fact, stanzas one and two could be tied nicely together, and serve as a delicate and mysterious path into the poem. Let the beautiful aspect be apparent rather than stated. For example, something like:
Love,
weaves like (an) ether
through our lives until —
like a silken sash
that draws near on a cold wind
(it) wraps (around) our neck
when we least expect.
The “Silken Sash” simile is perfect, readily understandable, and nicely anonymous as to the source of said sash. Perhaps my favourite stanza.
Going further, you could delay the introduction of Love a little:
It weaves like (an) ether
through our lives until —
like a silken sash
that draws near on a cold wind
Love wraps (around) our neck
when we least expect.
Anyway, the poem delightfully makes it clear that this is not human, romantic love, but the Love of that which we denote as God, Word, Spirit, with mentions of, holy purple-poison, frankincense, myrrh, gold, water lilies, desert, marrow bones.
(The last days of our lives
are beaming gold
but) Love is a piercing Light
that turns (our) tired minds
toward a direction beyond time.
The poem brings to mind “The Hound of Heaven”, and the final line is warm, and life-affirming.
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1st Jan 2024 2:40pm
Thanks for your suggestions, SeaCat. I've really learned something over the last year, and that's just posting something as it comes together. I used to sit on it for a few days, but now I just check for spelling/grammatical errors and let it go. This leaves it open to perspective and suggestions, which is a hell of a lot better than perfection because it helps me see my work from different views.
Happiest of New Year's to you! May it be blessed with happiness and prosperity in all that truly matters.
Happiest of New Year's to you! May it be blessed with happiness and prosperity in all that truly matters.
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All stages of a poem are worthwhile, from first draft to more completed versions. Making suggestions is a part of a poem’s life, and can also enrich the poet making the suggestion.
Thank you for your New Year wishes. May you find peaceful success and richly satisfying time in all that you do :)
Thank you for your New Year wishes. May you find peaceful success and richly satisfying time in all that you do :)
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1st Jan 2024 4:47pm
Exactly! I agree! It provides me with fresh ideas on the direction I want to take it!
Thank you for the wishes! They are reflected back!
Thank you for the wishes! They are reflected back!
Re. When We Least Expect
31st Dec 2023 6:15am
Love the wisdom and spiritual you brought to this piece. Maybe because I'm coming up on 50 i found it more relatable than an ever, not only for it's beauty but it's honesty.
Wonderful write Ahavati. Hope 2024 brings you everything in your heart.
Wonderful write Ahavati. Hope 2024 brings you everything in your heart.
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3rd Jan 2024 9:58am
This is so beautiful the whole way around :) Thoroughly enjoyed this, truly touches my heart and soul. You captured love and expressed it in every way possible. Love is whole as one but is also in so many other ways and forms as well. Truly beautiful reading. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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5th Jan 2024 7:23pm
Very rich vivid imagery. You have such a powerful command of language and the writing feels like story telling that is recited as poetry or sung.
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5th Jan 2024 11:46pm
Thank you, Lozzamus! I appreciate that observation, as I don't believe anyone's ever noted that before. But with your musical ear and talent, I can imagine your ability to equate the written word with song.