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When I look at her
She smiles.
When I touch her hand
She giggles.
When I put my arm around her waist
She feels weightless.
When I look in her eyes
She is content.
When I kiss her lips
She presses into mine
When I lean in and kiss her neck
She melts.
When she embraces me
I remain hers.
She smiles.
When I touch her hand
She giggles.
When I put my arm around her waist
She feels weightless.
When I look in her eyes
She is content.
When I kiss her lips
She presses into mine
When I lean in and kiss her neck
She melts.
When she embraces me
I remain hers.
Published 17th Dec 2023
| Edited 18th Dec 2023
Author's Note
Basic romance.
Wasn't expecting much feedback on this one, but pleasantly surprised. Thank you all.
Wasn't expecting much feedback on this one, but pleasantly surprised. Thank you all.
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17th Dec 2023 3:44am
Dear DV,
Absolutely beautiful poem. I enjoyed the tenderness of the piece and the quiet love between two people. Lovely write. H🌷
Absolutely beautiful poem. I enjoyed the tenderness of the piece and the quiet love between two people. Lovely write. H🌷
18th Dec 2023 8:59pm
Thank you so much Honoria. You are too kind, but I appreciate your thoughts and wisdom.
17th Dec 2023 1:46pm
18th Dec 2023 8:59pm
17th Dec 2023 5:28pm
This poem is amazing. Love is amazing.
I enjoyed reading your poem.
From: Keith Edward Baucum
I enjoyed reading your poem.
From: Keith Edward Baucum
18th Dec 2023 9:00pm
17th Dec 2023 9:42pm
Beautifully rendered sentiments that deeply touch me. I adore your immensely intimate and viscerally fresh construction and how it's boldness underscores each and every action as it gloriously welcomes every beautiful romantic reply.
Bravo, dear Leo.... Bravo.
-💙
Bravo, dear Leo.... Bravo.
-💙
20th Dec 2023 8:31pm
Wow, as a humble novice poet, I couldn’t ask for a more encouraging analysis. That my words touched such an esteemed poetess is like winning a Pulitzer in poetry. 🏆🧾
Thank-you for your time to read and comment. It meant a lot. 🎉🥂
Thank-you for your time to read and comment. It meant a lot. 🎉🥂
17th Dec 2023 9:52pm
What an endearing caressing of words, my wandering poet.
Enjoy your upcoming week in all you do.
Enjoy your upcoming week in all you do.
18th Dec 2023 9:02pm
18th Dec 2023 7:50am
Don't think I could anything that hasn't already been said..except, thanks for sharing 🥰❤💯🫂
18th Dec 2023 9:01pm
21st Dec 2023 1:56am
OMG DaVinci, this positively squishes with soft romance.
Great job floating the emotions through the entire poem.
Great job floating the emotions through the entire poem.
21st Dec 2023 1:20pm
Thanks, Betty, for a wonderful comment. Very happy you enjoyed it and may you have many romantic "squishes".
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16th Mar 2024 6:32pm
Oh how I love this
"When I put my arm around her waist
She feels weightless."
To experience such a wonder, I love it.
LJ
"When I put my arm around her waist
She feels weightless."
To experience such a wonder, I love it.
LJ
16th Mar 2024 8:58pm
LJ love hearing from you. Thank-you so much for the cool comment. I wish you "weightlessness" in your future.
-LD
-LD
31st Mar 2024 1:53pm
This poem breathes such grace and tenderness.
"When I put my arm around her waist
She feels weightless" > such amazing lines these are.
Enjoyed this write tremendeously :-)
"When I put my arm around her waist
She feels weightless" > such amazing lines these are.
Enjoyed this write tremendeously :-)
31st Mar 2024 3:24pm
You too made me smile with your comments. Thank-you so much for reaching and leaving a wonderful comment. Really glad you enjoyed the poem.
10th Apr 2024 00:05am
Basic romance
Beautiful expression
Filled with tenderness
And passion
Delights the eyes
And warms the heart
Leo, your poem is gorgeous! I love it's simplicity, smooth flow and endearing words! Well done, Leo!
Beautiful expression
Filled with tenderness
And passion
Delights the eyes
And warms the heart
Leo, your poem is gorgeous! I love it's simplicity, smooth flow and endearing words! Well done, Leo!
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21st Apr 2024 7:48pm
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22nd May 2024 1:27pm
23rd May 2024 5:29pm
23rd May 2024 6:48pm
You say "basic romance". I say love.
These are all things we experience with love, without any of the b.s.
These are all things we experience with love, without any of the b.s.
23rd May 2024 8:40pm
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10th Jun 2024 3:29pm
Most thankful for your read and comment. Hope the poem maintained dampness.
