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Orange Twilight
The universe bled profusely.
Oozing orange light.
The sleepy sun,
a glowing tangerine sight.
Only to be glimpsed
through carrot colored leaves
torched bright.
On gaunt trees that haunt
the approach of night.
Oozing orange light.
The sleepy sun,
a glowing tangerine sight.
Only to be glimpsed
through carrot colored leaves
torched bright.
On gaunt trees that haunt
the approach of night.
Author's Note
Tonight's sunset.
Dedicated to Billy. 😊
Dedicated to Billy. 😊
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Re. Orange Twilight
7th Nov 2023 00:32am
WOW! Lol, fancy some carrot sticks at McDonald's instead of french fries tonight? That's the vibe I'm getting here, haha. I don't feel I am totally worthy of an orange-infused glorious sunset. ;-)
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Hahaha
I don't even know how to respond to that.
I hate McDonalds. If they made carrot fries, I'd prob like them, lol.
You earned the dedication. 😊
Are u at the pub? If so, I'm jealous
I don't even know how to respond to that.
I hate McDonalds. If they made carrot fries, I'd prob like them, lol.
You earned the dedication. 😊
Are u at the pub? If so, I'm jealous
Re: Re. Orange Twilight
7th Nov 2023 00:37am
I am not in the pub, don't worry & I just wanted to say I am not worthy of your poem. 😚
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7th Nov 2023 00:42am
Re. Orange Twilight
7th Nov 2023 00:54am
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7th Nov 2023 1:15am
Crash away, lol. Thank you very much. To me, that is what the sunset looked like tonight.
Have a great night.
Have a great night.
Re. Orange Twilight
7th Nov 2023 1:30am
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7th Nov 2023 8:58am
Re. Orange Twilight
7th Nov 2023 6:25am
Dear D,
I really enjoyed your vivid image of the evenings sunset. There is such an awe and beauty and your write captures that wonderfully. H🌷
I really enjoyed your vivid image of the evenings sunset. There is such an awe and beauty and your write captures that wonderfully. H🌷
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7th Nov 2023 8:59am
Re. Orange Twilight
10th Nov 2023 10:11pm
Very succinct poem. The color and metaphors capture a unique aesthetic. Almost as if hauntingly disposed. Fleshly death, found in the enveloping horizon or fate of the universe, as it comes across to me, anyway, in relating to it. You did a good job with orange, tangerine, carrot, torching, the words of color you used to describe, as well as the other words. The direction and emotion were there. Overall, nice brevity. Very concise, and expressive!
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Re. Orange Twilight
11th Nov 2023 8:28am
Thanks so much for the feedback. That is exactly what the setting sun looked like. I'm glad you enjoyed. I enjoy your critique!!
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21st Mar 2024 12:04pm
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