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crying in the ice cream aisle
Teeth digging into my lip
White knuckling the cart
The gelato and ice cream in the fridge
Blurring into swirling color splotches
I cannot let the tears fall here... I can't
So I find myself looking at the dirty ceiling
As if some savior can be found there
Yet the tears cannot help but fall as tears do
On a Sunday afternoon in a grocery store
White knuckling the cart
The gelato and ice cream in the fridge
Blurring into swirling color splotches
I cannot let the tears fall here... I can't
So I find myself looking at the dirty ceiling
As if some savior can be found there
Yet the tears cannot help but fall as tears do
On a Sunday afternoon in a grocery store
Published 5th Nov 2023
| Edited 5th Mar 2024
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6th Nov 2023 4:40am
Dear B,
The raw emotion of your poem is so intense and you capture the action of trying to control a tsunami of tears brilliantly. Excellently written. H🌷
The raw emotion of your poem is so intense and you capture the action of trying to control a tsunami of tears brilliantly. Excellently written. H🌷
6th Nov 2023 8:43pm
6th Nov 2023 10:43am
Your raw carnal truths slay me in the best most profound ways.... I've been missing from DUP for awhile but still reading when I could... Your ink is and has always been a go to for me, BBG.. So, a most heartfelt "Thank you" for still being amongst us and for being so real and unabashedly open.
*Please, know all your talents are deeply inspiring....
Much love, dear one.
🌹💙
*Please, know all your talents are deeply inspiring....
Much love, dear one.
🌹💙
6th Nov 2023 8:44pm
Those breakdowns are the hardest, emotions don’t care where we are or who’s around.
Hope you were ok after
Hope you were ok after
18th Nov 2023 10:18pm
22nd Nov 2023 5:26pm
I think we've all been in that position. Like standing in hip deep water with gentle waves and then you see the rising crest, and you know there's not much you can do to stop it. Your poem's words portrayed the situation, and you expressed it very well.
Anonymous
31st Dec 2023 6:19pm
There’s something so pure about this write, that you just can’t help but look away. The sheer vulnerability of it, and the humanity too. How we’ve all had those moments where emotion becomes us. How we’ve tried so hard to hold it in.
I really loved the simplicity of it. Thank you.
I really loved the simplicity of it. Thank you.
