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The Flowers
I've known 1,000 crooks
read 10,000 books
still like my whiskey with sour
took 500 aims
at my 5,000,000 blames
as I sit all alone at the fire
my hands are now cold
but my heart is still bold
waiting on some newfound desire
if I don't think quick
i just might miss
my opportunity to fuck up the flowers
it's been 700 months
i met 31 monks
not one of them had a thing to say
i poured 20,000 baths
to clean one shiny ass
won't you give it a kiss today
now my hands are pickled
and it's so hard to explain
being fickle the name of the game
i think I'll swing first
just the way it's rehearsed
you may ask why I do it this way
it's my ability to fuck up the flowers
ALWAYS! Those GOD DAMN FLOWERS!
read 10,000 books
still like my whiskey with sour
took 500 aims
at my 5,000,000 blames
as I sit all alone at the fire
my hands are now cold
but my heart is still bold
waiting on some newfound desire
if I don't think quick
i just might miss
my opportunity to fuck up the flowers
it's been 700 months
i met 31 monks
not one of them had a thing to say
i poured 20,000 baths
to clean one shiny ass
won't you give it a kiss today
now my hands are pickled
and it's so hard to explain
being fickle the name of the game
i think I'll swing first
just the way it's rehearsed
you may ask why I do it this way
it's my ability to fuck up the flowers
ALWAYS! Those GOD DAMN FLOWERS!
Published 19th Sep 2023
| Edited 14th Nov 2024
Author's Note
Self sabotage. I got the rhyme in my head and thought let's metaphor! The flowers represent the good stuff. Take the rest as you see fit.
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19th Sep 2023 3:53am
I think I'll swing first
Just the way it's rehearsed
This is like the architectural rendering of a multitude of related metaphors.
Just the way it's rehearsed
This is like the architectural rendering of a multitude of related metaphors.
19th Sep 2023 4:14am
runningturtle87 Thank you so much for the read. I hope you liked it. That is surreal. That's kinda how I was thinking about it. The layers of paint we must lather onto the wall.
19th Sep 2023 11:46am
Okay then...reading on task...
If the basic shape is the same and surface changes alone are made, it's the same...with different versions....another way to see it is like paint that changes color on a car...our perspective changes as it moves by us.....making it appear to change color from another angle.
Actually, perspective is all that changes.
The only thing that changes is how well we can integrate our perceptions into an integrated whole so that world makes sense.
We are decoding reality in a synchronicity. Interdependence is kicking independence's butt. is
If the basic shape is the same and surface changes alone are made, it's the same...with different versions....another way to see it is like paint that changes color on a car...our perspective changes as it moves by us.....making it appear to change color from another angle.
Actually, perspective is all that changes.
The only thing that changes is how well we can integrate our perceptions into an integrated whole so that world makes sense.
We are decoding reality in a synchronicity. Interdependence is kicking independence's butt. is
19th Sep 2023 12:33pm
The paint on the car. Yah that is it the perspective. All the words have been written, yet we can still bend them to our will.
Have a great day today runningturtle87.
Have a great day today runningturtle87.
19th Sep 2023 4:34am
Your philosophical musing(s) I seem to have to ponder a little deeper, my love, whereas, I am learning your subtext reads more than what meets the eyes.
And once you get down to the nucleus of your embracing undertones, I will add, you are quite unique.
Continue to bedazzle us poetesses with such trivial words to inspire ... in the brevity, this ink spill is nicely composed.
Enjoy your late evening as we are heading to the helm of another blessed day, once crossed, enjoy the dawn of your new day.
And once you get down to the nucleus of your embracing undertones, I will add, you are quite unique.
Continue to bedazzle us poetesses with such trivial words to inspire ... in the brevity, this ink spill is nicely composed.
Enjoy your late evening as we are heading to the helm of another blessed day, once crossed, enjoy the dawn of your new day.
19th Sep 2023 12:38pm
Thank you Poetess. I appreciate your kind words. May the travels of your day bring you joy and peace,
Bat
Bat
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19th Sep 2023 12:40pm
Thank you for the read PoetSpeak. A limerick knocked on my door, I had to answer it.LOL
Bat
Bat
19th Sep 2023 2:59pm
Sometimes so messed up we just no longer where to turn. Hitting a bunch of flowers less harmful than hitting a brickwall and fucking up your wrists.
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14th Nov 2024 2:08pm
hello dearest Bat this seemed to me to be about marriage just my perspective of course perhaps a picky wife who you work hard to keep happy won't even give you a kiss because you messed up one little thing that's hurtful I myself have to pray God guards my tongue because I can switch up just that fast now a days I let things to because I don't like the hurt that insues being overly sensitive ❤️ either way great write which many could identify with...
Your insights into this are eye opening. Yah a spouse who has been through the ringer. Not unhappy life in general but maybe just sure of themselves and how they move forward. Thanks for taking the time to reflect on this. Hope you have a wonderful day on your piece of this crazy bouncing ball.
Bat
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