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My Moon

i search for the moon the moon that makes me feel whole but it hasnt come
where is it?
i need i need this energy it passes to me oh why has it abandon me why must that fluff of gray hide it from me
i am alone i have no one i feel like i have no one to share my life.
i search oh how i search for my one love the energy that makes me Me
then the puff starts to fade and i see you once again my beloved moon my life my soul reach for you and summit into a deep trance i have you once again.
oh my moon never leave me again for this time i will surely die.

Written by dianajr

(dinamystery)

Published 13th Feb 2010

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Nice

forever-for_real (Tess Stoops)

13th Apr 2010 2:57am

I like how u worded this poem. It sound pretty shakespearian
i like it

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My Moon

veronique

13th Apr 2010 10:09pm

punctuation is sorely required and what
about your line breaks? Are they
arbitrary casualties?

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dianajr (dinamystery)

4th May 2010 4:31am

ok well im glad you read my work but honestly i dont dont search for criticism sadly but thanks for telling me
poetry isnt soppose to be perfect its what you make it what it means that counts
Thanks :)

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Finding_herself

17th Jun 2010 7:01pm

... how you layed out this one. I feel like its more of a poem to be spoken, not read. i love poems like that, especially when they are read how they are meant to sound. i love how you chop everything up, and how theres no absolute pattern. ^^love it