Glinting skin

Cute

God bless you

Hey 🥰
Thanks

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Thanks for your meaningful comment..

A very enticing write. Since you asked for friendly feedback, I would suggest drawing out the narrative a bit. Asking someone to cover you in chocolate sauce could take some time to enjoy so might be worth taking time to describe. There is a contrast in energy and intensity between the tearing of clothing versus eating chocolate off your body. Perhaps building up the contrast of quick/energetic versus slow. Just my $0.02.

An inning can be played by tearing the clothes n In which the intensity of having sex will be high. And after lying on the same bed, the second inning can be played. Which can be started with chocolate syrup.. something new and chocolaty..

I’m a fan of both chocolate and baseball…so sign me up!

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A sweet and tasty offer that deserves to be played out longer. The poem as it is though does get the reader's attention in quickly.  
 
Your comments about innings rang their own bell with me as it so reminds me of cricket which your country are great rivals to mine on. (Not to mention it's a game that involves balls and 'maidens bowled over'..)

You are absolutely right.  I love cricket very much and that is why I have used the word "inning" here. N in which the game is started and finished along with playing one and the second innings. N here I wanna won the match.. Well thanks ss for your lovely comment.. I liked it!

Chocolate syrup on your sexy body is very hot.  Keep on writing.

Thank you very much F.

Chocolate is so much fun, isn’t it?
I suppose that why people become chocoholics.
Have a great day dimpy.

Yeah marry
Fun with chocolate is unique
N I love melted hot chocolate.. and you can understand how I tasted it..as you are a sexy darling!

Hoi hoi
A brave way to show that meaningful doesn’t have to get in the way of playful.
And vice versa.

Love your work, Ms D.!
Thank you.
Kind regards, Gus

Thanks you very much for stopping by! Glad you liked my words!

Ok! I've had it! YOU are responsible for paying half of my water bill from all of these cold showers you keep making me take!

Aww yeahhh
why not..i am ready to pay

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uh?....wasn't?........o...k

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all good :)