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A perfect day at the beach

A perfect day at the beach
The ultimane tan to reach
Time is our hourglass
No good time to let go and pass
� A perfect day at the beach

No time to waste on the Screech
No time to waste on Meech
Keep your eyes on the beauty with class
With her you could have a lot of spass
� A perfect day at the beach

Go to her, no need to beseech
Hey, hello is a part of speech
Nice words work better than crass
Get moving, go see the lass
� A perfect day at the beach.

Written by robert43041

(Viking)

Published 13th Jul 2023

Author's Note

For Rew's comp. � PS: Screech is a sort of booze. �Meech (as in the Lake Meech accord).......... and spass is a german word for fun

#courage #happiness

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Re. A perfect day at the beach

dartford (Paul S...)

14th Jul 2023 00:28am

I like that you include words your readers are unaware of course I�m one of the those unaware readers, so thank you for the footnote

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robert43041 (Viking)

14th Jul 2023 2:10pm

Lots of effort to try to please Rew with this entrance to her comp. Always appreciate that you drop by. Regards, Robert.

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Re. A perfect day at the beach

Rew

1st Aug 2023 10:14pm

I wasn't allowed to comment on the results of this competition merely to make an award so here's the comment I've left on the competition after I voted.

(A ⭐ and special mention must go to Robert43041 (Viking) for grappling with the way history (and the Brits?) have mangled the meaning of the french word " rondeau " thus making it difficult for them to get to grips with the form in their " A perfect day at the beach ". imho.)

Thank you for taking part.