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Wintergreen
I remember at fifteen
Blinking lights
Color of wintergreen
Above a summer night
Underneath a June twilight
On a ride steering
The Ferris Wheel
Slow loud spins
Feeling alive
Elevated to the top
Loving life
Way up high In the sky
Laughing you and I
Eighties painted eyes
Red feathers in my hair
Glancing at you
Trying not to stare
Wondering if
You'll make a move
Or will it be me
Your hand on my knee
We're spinning around
Inventing Wintergreen rings
Breeze rushes our face
Faint scent of funnel cake
My electric pulse energized
By an upright merry go round
Almost time to get off
We're lowering down
Both feet exiting
The Ferris wheel cart
Teenage lips grounded
Finally finding our mark
Kissing you and I
Illuminated in Wintergreen
Blinking lights
Color of wintergreen
Above a summer night
Underneath a June twilight
On a ride steering
The Ferris Wheel
Slow loud spins
Feeling alive
Elevated to the top
Loving life
Way up high In the sky
Laughing you and I
Eighties painted eyes
Red feathers in my hair
Glancing at you
Trying not to stare
Wondering if
You'll make a move
Or will it be me
Your hand on my knee
We're spinning around
Inventing Wintergreen rings
Breeze rushes our face
Faint scent of funnel cake
My electric pulse energized
By an upright merry go round
Almost time to get off
We're lowering down
Both feet exiting
The Ferris wheel cart
Teenage lips grounded
Finally finding our mark
Kissing you and I
Illuminated in Wintergreen
Author's Note
Every summer the fair comes to town.
I remember when I was in my teens popping balloons with darts and winning
feather clip-ons for my hair!
I could see the Ferris wheel from miles away!
I remember when I was in my teens popping balloons with darts and winning
feather clip-ons for my hair!
I could see the Ferris wheel from miles away!
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Re. Wintergreen
25th Jun 2023 7:41pm
The fair is a magical place, even if the games are rigged we sometimes we all don't mind being taken. We think on the crowds of all ages but with one smile, and we think of it as a unifying place. There will always be memories as a teen of the one purchases, one cotton candy to be shared, one candy apple, this ensure she doesn't mind eating behind you and will give you a kiss. Tight work with bringing back the memories Lady, thanks
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Re: Re. Wintergreen
25th Jun 2023 7:47pm
Hey Meme
I'm so glad you got caught up in my nostalgic Ferris wheel ride.
It use to get me nervous but then I would start
to try and rock it back and forth. To scare my riding partner. LOL
Either way - it was always towards the end of the nigh before I would
get on. The line would be shorter. LOL
Nice to see ya buddy!!
I'm so glad you got caught up in my nostalgic Ferris wheel ride.
It use to get me nervous but then I would start
to try and rock it back and forth. To scare my riding partner. LOL
Either way - it was always towards the end of the nigh before I would
get on. The line would be shorter. LOL
Nice to see ya buddy!!
Re. Wintergreen
25th Jun 2023 7:58pm
Re: Re. Wintergreen
25th Jun 2023 8:08pm
Hi LilD
Memories can be dreamlike and sometimes we edit to fit
our current moments. Hope that makes sense. LOL
To this day I still love getting a funnel cake with powdered sugar
at the fair!
It's a must to enjoy while walking to your car.
Thanks for stopping by:)
Memories can be dreamlike and sometimes we edit to fit
our current moments. Hope that makes sense. LOL
To this day I still love getting a funnel cake with powdered sugar
at the fair!
It's a must to enjoy while walking to your car.
Thanks for stopping by:)
Re. Wintergreen
25th Jun 2023 8:37pm
I really like this one.
There's magic and nostalgia anyone could see themselves in. Can almost smell the funnel cake and cotton candy.
Wonderful writing ✍
BIG LIKE
There's magic and nostalgia anyone could see themselves in. Can almost smell the funnel cake and cotton candy.
Wonderful writing ✍
BIG LIKE
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Re: Re. Wintergreen
26th Jun 2023 2:29am
Hi PS!
It was the closest thing to flying I did at that age.
The lights for me were energizing. It made me so excited and
ready to experience the magic of youth with all of my friends.
The games too!
Thanks for stopping by and the RL amigo!
It was the closest thing to flying I did at that age.
The lights for me were energizing. It made me so excited and
ready to experience the magic of youth with all of my friends.
The games too!
Thanks for stopping by and the RL amigo!
Re. Wintergreen
This was pure heartfelt poetic perfection. I adore how your lovely delve into waxing nostalgically collides with the sheer cleverness of your pen.
I felt the feather hair clips in my own hair and the freedom that we had as kids to just roam without much supervision in the summer time.... I loved elephant ears and those fair fries in the cup... yum!
Really impressive detail, which transported me right back to 'those were the days' kinda feels.
Well done, dear lady
🌹 💙
I felt the feather hair clips in my own hair and the freedom that we had as kids to just roam without much supervision in the summer time.... I loved elephant ears and those fair fries in the cup... yum!
Really impressive detail, which transported me right back to 'those were the days' kinda feels.
Well done, dear lady
🌹 💙
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Re: Re. Wintergreen
26th Jun 2023 2:41am
Hello B:)
Thank you so much for such this comment. You are spot on about the freedom to be kids. I was so excited the first time my parents let go of the
reins. Running around and having a blast with all of my friends. Some of the best memories of my life happened at the fair.
And I was super duper proud of my feather hair clips. I won them all by myself - no boy won them for me - just me and a great aim at balloons. LOL
Thanks for giving me such positive feedback on this write.
On a different note
I just started the first episode of Yellowjackets!!!
Later chica!!
Thank you so much for such this comment. You are spot on about the freedom to be kids. I was so excited the first time my parents let go of the
reins. Running around and having a blast with all of my friends. Some of the best memories of my life happened at the fair.
And I was super duper proud of my feather hair clips. I won them all by myself - no boy won them for me - just me and a great aim at balloons. LOL
Thanks for giving me such positive feedback on this write.
On a different note
I just started the first episode of Yellowjackets!!!
Later chica!!
Re. Wintergreen
26th Jun 2023 1:38am
The ferris wheel of Love. I would prefer the tunnel of Love myself. Keep on writing.
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Re: Re. Wintergreen
26th Jun 2023 2:44am
Hey there Cisco!
The ferris wheel of love has a great view! Can't say the same about
the tunnel but I can say it's a bit more private. LOL
I'm doing my best on the writing amigo
thanks for the encouragement:)
The ferris wheel of love has a great view! Can't say the same about
the tunnel but I can say it's a bit more private. LOL
I'm doing my best on the writing amigo
thanks for the encouragement:)
Re: Re. Wintergreen
26th Jun 2023 2:49am
Re. Wintergreen
26th Jun 2023 2:29am
Dare I say that you're on a roll as of late?!
It's always a sweet surprise to see you posting. I'm glad that the creative fortune is finding you again!
Everyone is already mentioning the nostalgia aspect of this write. But also the little details that make us smile and yet feel a bit of envy for such a memory. The one part I notice, that stands out for me, is how you chose for the kiss to happen once they were on solid ground, and not while "up in the air", where things are iffy. It's a kiss of strength.
What a happy thing to read this evening.
(No, I won't mention how some wintergreen mints are pink. Because the world makes no sense sometimes!)
It's always a sweet surprise to see you posting. I'm glad that the creative fortune is finding you again!
Everyone is already mentioning the nostalgia aspect of this write. But also the little details that make us smile and yet feel a bit of envy for such a memory. The one part I notice, that stands out for me, is how you chose for the kiss to happen once they were on solid ground, and not while "up in the air", where things are iffy. It's a kiss of strength.
What a happy thing to read this evening.
(No, I won't mention how some wintergreen mints are pink. Because the world makes no sense sometimes!)
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Re: Re. Wintergreen
Inspiration comes from the strangest place. I like to play with my rings occasionally and spin them on my finger and I though about ferris wheels.
True story! How we all have mini ferris wheels on our fingers that we spin ourselves. Thought I'd blend it with some fair memories and the color of wintergreen. I love the vivid color of green.
I was so tempted to write the kiss "up in the air" but opted out.
It felt cliche. When I was up there I was so excited about the view.
I'd never been that high in the air at that age so I wanted to take it
all in.
Pink mints are dumb!!
Kinda like false advertising
they should be wintergreen
it even has the word winter in
it to prepare you for the coldness!!
If they are pink it should be bubble gum
flavor or cotton candy!!
Just saying. LOL
Holy crap - that was a bit of a rant - yikes
True story! How we all have mini ferris wheels on our fingers that we spin ourselves. Thought I'd blend it with some fair memories and the color of wintergreen. I love the vivid color of green.
I was so tempted to write the kiss "up in the air" but opted out.
It felt cliche. When I was up there I was so excited about the view.
I'd never been that high in the air at that age so I wanted to take it
all in.
Pink mints are dumb!!
Kinda like false advertising
they should be wintergreen
it even has the word winter in
it to prepare you for the coldness!!
If they are pink it should be bubble gum
flavor or cotton candy!!
Just saying. LOL
Holy crap - that was a bit of a rant - yikes
Re. Wintergreen
26th Jun 2023 6:17am
Dear A,
What a throwback to life when it was as carefree as it can be for a kid! We had a fair every summer and I used to love trying to win things. The roller coaster was my ride of choice. What a thrill. But the Ferris wheel allowed a view like no other. Freedom and fun and guys and candy. Loved this piece and the wonderful nostalgia it brought back. H🌷
What a throwback to life when it was as carefree as it can be for a kid! We had a fair every summer and I used to love trying to win things. The roller coaster was my ride of choice. What a thrill. But the Ferris wheel allowed a view like no other. Freedom and fun and guys and candy. Loved this piece and the wonderful nostalgia it brought back. H🌷
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Re: Re. Wintergreen
4th Jul 2023 10:38pm
Hi H!!
Yes - when it only comes around once a year - it was always such a closing impact for summer. Ours always came around August. Still does.
Right when school starts back up. We share school schedules - see who has the same classes. Bumping into people you haven't seen in a while.
Great times!!
Glad you enjoyed it!!
Always nice to hear from ya:)
Yes - when it only comes around once a year - it was always such a closing impact for summer. Ours always came around August. Still does.
Right when school starts back up. We share school schedules - see who has the same classes. Bumping into people you haven't seen in a while.
Great times!!
Glad you enjoyed it!!
Always nice to hear from ya:)
Re. Wintergreen
28th Jun 2023 1:44am
Re: Re. Wintergreen
4th Jul 2023 10:41pm
Hi Hash:)
I enjoy giving people smiles and tingles. It means I'm doing my job as a writer so thank you for that. hahaha
Thank you so much for stopping by and taking a read:)
I enjoy giving people smiles and tingles. It means I'm doing my job as a writer so thank you for that. hahaha
Thank you so much for stopping by and taking a read:)
Re. Wintergreen
4th Jul 2023 10:53pm
This is wonderful. Full of excitement & fresh opportunity. I'd always encourage writers to revisit their youth. I have, in many poems, some you haven't seen yet, I dare say! But anyway... when looking back, isn't it funny how you don't feel any different in terms of your impulses or feelings, even if just for a minute?
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Re: Re. Wintergreen
4th Jul 2023 11:01pm
Hey there Billy!
yes - even today I still get excited about new opportunities - whatever they may be. In writing and in life. Capturing that feeling reminds us to enjoy life and don't try and overthink everything. Who want's to be the older grouchy lady - Not Me!! LOL
Thanks for enjoying my time travel in this piece.
Glad you enjoyed the ride amigo!
yes - even today I still get excited about new opportunities - whatever they may be. In writing and in life. Capturing that feeling reminds us to enjoy life and don't try and overthink everything. Who want's to be the older grouchy lady - Not Me!! LOL
Thanks for enjoying my time travel in this piece.
Glad you enjoyed the ride amigo!
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Re: Re. Wintergreen
21st Jul 2023 00:57am
Well Howdy!!!!
What a sight for me to see you on my page buddy:)
Thank you!!!
The fair is just around the corner.
I hope life has been treating you wonderful!!
Thanks for the RL
Woop Woop!!!
What a sight for me to see you on my page buddy:)
Thank you!!!
The fair is just around the corner.
I hope life has been treating you wonderful!!
Thanks for the RL
Woop Woop!!!